What do you guys think

Signore_cristiano · Post by **Signore_cristiano** » Mon Nov 07, 2005 7:07 pm

Ok i did this in Adobe Illustrator. What do guys think?

Jackhass · Post by **Jackhass** » Mon Nov 07, 2005 9:47 pm

I guess it's okay for a doodle...but it's nothing too amazing.

Black Sparrow · Post by **Black Sparrow** » Mon Nov 07, 2005 9:54 pm

That's not bad, for Illustrator. That's a tough one to master.

But the pic needs shading or coloring. Right now, it looks like little more than a pencil sketch (with a couple eye-and-ear related errors). You might want to be more specific in your critique requests. What exactly do you want from us?

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 12:29 am

It would be much more dynamic if there were some line weight in there.

Phalanx · Post by **Phalanx** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 4:24 am

Suika wrote:It would be much more dynamic if there were some line weight in there.

What she said. The lines are all the same thickness, it causes the image to look very flat. Add to this the lines do not form shapes, so it gives the image a disconnected look. Not sure if it's what you were looking for though.

I'm not exactly an expert in Illustrator myself, but here's something I did using that. I wouldn't call it good because the thicknesses are inconsistent and do not correspond to the light, but it should give you a good idea how much difference different line weights can give to an image

JohnLynch · Post by **JohnLynch** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 5:04 am

What everyone else said. Also, one of those ears should be blocking the jawline. People are rarely drawn straight on (and from what I've sen in real life, perspective is also rarely straight on as well when you look at people) e.g. the guy in this strip. Only real nitpick, for a doodle it's pretty good

Signore_cristiano · Post by **Signore_cristiano** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:12 am

Thanks, everybody for ur help. That was my first time making anything in Illustrator, so i was kinda nervous about it. I generally wanted to know if it was any good and ways i can improve it....

about the shading im really not that good at it...and i didnt know how to shade in Illustrator either...

I did make the lines thicker

also i show the picture to my mom last night and she thinks i showed to much of her chest....

Do you all agree with her?

Jen_Babcock · Post by **Jen_Babcock** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 1:44 pm

That looks a lot better

signore_cristiano wrote:
also i show the picture to my mom last night and she thinks i showed to much of her chest.... Do you all agree with her?

No- boobs are great.

Corgan_dane · Post by **Corgan_dane** » Tue Nov 08, 2005 3:00 pm

The newer one looks much better with the line thickness' varied.

...and your mom is just being a mom.

Wp · Post by Wp » Tue Nov 08, 2005 3:09 pm

There should be variation of line width in a single line. On some parts of your picture, the thickness is the same all the way through the line even though each line has a different width. Also, the forehead is a little small. I'm think you're trying to draw a younger person since her eyes are so big, so her forehead should also be larger.