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I been making Dust Bunnies strips and posting them at Keenspace for a bit more than 2 months now; I get about 90 hits a day which is nice for a new kid on the block. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif"> <P>One thing, I have yet to get any email about my strip and it would be nice to get some feedback. Tell me what you think of my comic strip tell me what you like what you don't or anything would be greatly appreciated.
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"Dust bunnies" is much better than many strips I've read recently. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif"><P>Is "Huelin" your RL name or some multylingual pun?
Cute comic, though a lot of the punchlines fall flat. Also, proofreading yer comics is good too. It's all too often that a good comic is destroyed by bad grammar. Your art style could use a bit of improvement. Though I prefer a slighly more or slightly less cartoonish look to furs (you've hit right between my tastes), I'm not being biased in any way. The only way to improve at drawing is to draw, so, go for it!<P>Now that the constructive criticism is out of the way, time for the good comments, yay!<P>The swiss army dildo was great! Never expected that one. The storyline is intriguing. It's hard to do a comic strip with a sexual focus. Take Kit & Kay Boodle by Richard Katellis, for example. It goes way too slow, making it not funny, and the comic is not the type to masturbate to. However, the art is immaculate. Katellis is a great artist. Yours has humor, and it's tasteful enough to avoid masturbating to. Hope to see more of this strip!
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ZOMBIE USER 4562
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F'ing great! I added you to my links page... <A HREF="http://www.mamabliss.com/" TARGET=_blank>http://www.mamabliss.com/</A> ...keep up the good work!
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I like this comic!<P>Regarding the poll: I think there should be more story stuff; however, as far as I can tell, you're getting into that now. I voted for a villain; I think we'll be seeing said villain as the guy who stole Rob's stuff. It was the guy with the moving van and all the sex toys! He had the cunt plant!<P>Also, it has just the RIGHT amount of erotica. Any more and it'd crowd out the humor. Any less and it wouldn't be as FUN!<P>------------------
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017
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Thanks all for your support! Soon, I will create a link button for those who want to add the bunnies to their web pages, and send one to mamabliss <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif">
The poll I created for the strip is giving me interesting results, seems the voters want more erotic content yet Alfador makes a good point about it being more erotic. I should of wrote arch enemy rather than villain in the poll cause it won't be the guy with the moving van and all the sex toys.<P>Eric Huelin
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The poll I created for the strip is giving me interesting results, seems the voters want more erotic content yet Alfador makes a good point about it being more erotic. I should of wrote arch enemy rather than villain in the poll cause it won't be the guy with the moving van and all the sex toys.<P>Eric Huelin
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And of course, the logo of the store HAD to be a sperm cell. One question:<P>Who's PRODUCING all of it?! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/eek.gif"><P>------------------
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017
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Oh. That makes sense now! Heeheehee!<P>------------------
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017
Three-tailed fox, in the <A HREF="http://vcl.ctrl-c.liu.se/vcl/Artists/Alfador" TARGET=_blank>house</A>--<A HREF="http://alfador.8m.com" TARGET=_blank>Fox Den</A>, that is!<P><A HREF="http://umlauthouse.keenspace.com" TARGET=_blank>Rick/Jake</A> Shipper #00017