Fascinating! Hey, whatever way of learning works. That'll only improve with time. Have you got even an itsy bitsy sketchpad that you can bring round with you? That works wonders. Not sure how old you are, but even just doodling during class helps out- I've broken out of many plateaus in my drawing just by messing around like that.
I think you have an interesting art style, although your writing is stronger than your art. I find that many people have vastly superior art skills that carry their writing, or vice versa, but you have more of a balance between the two. Regarding your art specifically, I think your style is there, but it could use some honing, and that will come as you learn more about drawing. Your art seems very manga-influenced, but without stereotypical tropes one would usually find therein- like the sweatdrop and so forth. I appreciate that, but just make sure you don't rely on the animesque style to avoid learning how to do things your own way, if you understand what I mean.
It is interesting that you are writing out of your general comfort zone. Good for you! Many people- myself included- neglect to do this, and I think it is disadvantageous in the long run. It never hurts to expand your skill set beyond whatever inherent strengths you have.
Oh yeah, I'm just really picky about what I read, haha. This work is a little too fantastical for me, but I am glad to provide feedback if I can. The gloomy mindset is coming across better in the writing than in the art, but like I said, as you get more comfortable with your art, you will be able to express yourself better visually in addition to what you can already do verbally. I am glad that your outlines are more fluid as I would hate to see you get stuck in a situation where you could improve but are afraid to stray from the laid out plan. I find that that way works best for me as well, keep a few important events in mind and adjust accordingly.
Good luck with this endeavor, and feel free to come back whenever you need further critiques.
Don't kid yourself, friend. I still know how.