I could use some feedback on my strip

Think your comic can improve? Whether it's art or writing, composition or colouring, feel free to ask here! Critique and commentary welcome.

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tell me about it. THAT'LL change soon, but in the meantime, I'm doing what I can with what I have
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Ah, I remember my first internet connection. That modem noise still haunts my nightmares...

Getting back on topic, Your new Logo looks alot better now that its nice and simple.

However, there were a few times where your text was kinda hard to read, like here foe one:
http://theresetbutton.comicgenesis.com/d/20060823.html
and here:
http://theresetbutton.comicgenesis.com/d/20060831.html

this might not apply to everybody, (since I like to keep my screen on highest resolution because it makes using photoshop easier,) but at times im finding myself right up against the screen.
<a href="http://sci.comicgenesis.com"><img border="0" src="http://sci.comicgenesis.com/images/sigbanner.jpg" width="282" height="70">

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I see where you're coming from. I try to make it accessible for those with either a 1024x768 resolution or lower. Public libraries and schools still has a resolution of 800x600, so I try to aim in that direction. But I'm glad you're seeing an improvement, though
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How does it look now?
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I really like the style of the drawings and coloring. I think the jaggity edges around the characters make it look more pixely like a video game. A few tips tho:

-Speech bubbles: A lot of the time they're getting in the way and covering up some of the artwork. The point of the speech bubble doesn't need to go directly into the character's mouth. As long as its pointing to the character who's speaking, we know who's saying what. Try to layout your panels so that you can fit both characters and speech bubbles in without one having to over power the other.

- Layout: I noticed this in Sept 5th strip. People tend to read comics (and just about anything else) left to right, top to bottom, but this comic puts the speak bubbles backwards. If the reader has to read things over and rearrange them to make sense it loses almost all of the humor. Try to layout the bubbles so that the first one you read (the top most, left most one) is the first one you should be reading and not a reply to the bottom most, right most one. If you're unsure get a friend to read it over and tell you if it makes sense or not.

- Fuzzy text: Not sure what's causing this, but a few of the comics hurt my eyes to read them. I don't think its a resizing issue, since the rest of your lines are super crisp. I don't think its a quality or file type issue... Maybe its the font? Or the program you're using. I dunno. If there's an option to change the anti-alias or whatever (photoshop has it... gives you options like strong, crisp, smooth and none) try using crisp or strong.

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I think it's the program. And I see what you mean by yesterday's comic. That'll be fixed by tonight. I can always switch programs to fix the text (I ordered Photoshop today, so I'll have it by next week)
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