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Post by Oualawouzou »

Hello everybody,

I am just about to ressucitate Agaric, and also to try my hand at a new style. I'd like advices on this new style as it is completely different from what I've done so far. (ETA: to be precise, that new style would be for a second comic, not to take Agaric's place.)

Here's the first strip I completed:

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So... do you think it could work? Are featureless stick characters overdone on the interwebz? Do they look somewhat "lively" nonetheless? Does the font suck? I suck at fonts...

Whatever you have to say, go ahead!

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Sorry, it just looks lazy to me =/ Like, you decided to do silhouettes instead of real drawings in order to save time. Note that these aren't stick-figures per se, as the anatomies are generally correct, so it doesn't even have a minimalist or post-modern appeal. The joke is also weak which hurts the strip a lot since the art is boring to look at.
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Post by Jin-roh »

It is okay. It is probably not something I would follow. It took me some to figure out that the "hair" was a beard and not another character. There is not enough expression in the characters, which is a consequence of "no faces."
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Post by Oualawouzou »

Thanks, both of you.

Weirdly enough, doing this took me about as much time as doing an Agaric strip, so it doesn't even save me time. :P But I understand how it can give this impression. I'll see if I can kick things up a notch or two, so that it doesn't give the impression I am slacking off and to make the characters... er, "clearer", for lack of a better term.

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