Data Chasers

[Datachasers]

heya all new to this and looking for feed back on what ive done so far

its at http://datachasers.comicgenesis.com/

and im not really getting much feed back as was looking for some
good and bad

[Megaskunjii]

Well, I took a look at the first few panels, but nothing really grabbed me. Now, I don't like CG-generated comics as a general rule so keep in mind my opinion is pretty biased. I also tend not to follow "serious" comics either, so really I'm not in your target audience here.

I can suggest this though: I think your panels are way too large. It's a huge, vertically scrolling comic and it takes a while to load each page. Now, the largeness has two major disadvantages:

1. Slow to load
2. Slow to read

So if I can offer any suggestions, I'm going to say shrink the panels down so a lot more of the story can be read in one go.

[Warofwinds]

Hey there, datachasers, nice comic you've got going to far^^ The sets are well built, the characters rather realistic for 3D models and the narration is for the most part well done. There were a bunch of spelling/grammar errors in a couple pages, such as "concididers" and your/you're switch ups. I like the story so far, especially the android characters and their designs. The nano weapon was rad.

I would suggest going easier on the use of punctuation. You only need ONE "!" or "?", not 3 or 4, even if you want to add stress to the narrative. I would also suggest tightening up the word balloons and narrative boxes so there's not so much extra space. Also, please keep conventions and colors for narration steady. Sometimes text, size, or design changes with word balloons or narrative boxes from page to page. Once or twice is fine as you find out what you like, but not too often. My last bit of advice is to split up some of those really long "days," where a single page is composed of, like, 15. It would make for easier reading.

Lastly, bookmarked. I'll be checking back.

[Datachasers]

Hey there, datachasers, where a single page is composed of, like, 15. It would make for easier reading.

Lastly, bookmarked. I'll be checking back.

ok

thank you both of you for this - this is helpful
the panels are being "edited" now
i was posting them right after i made them - ie "Raw" i can see thats not really the right way to go

we are still defineing the "standards" for human andriod and such-
most of them have diffrent sounding voices and i trying to put that forth -
i know .. my spelling sucks major ass
my editor complains dayly to stick to the art and not try letter them

ill see what i can do about "breaking up " the old stuff
i tend to forget not everyone is on a cable-highspeed ive tried to "slice" the file size and optimize it but it loses a lot of fine detail -

in anycase keep the comments coming - it will help me improve it -
thank you!

[Megaskunjii]

Hey there.

Listen, I KNOW your pain for losing detail. My own comic has a minimalistic approach to backgrounds, but even I wince at the loss when I have to shrink the sucker.

But I wanted to make sure that my comic would load fast. So, you have to make sacrifices.

[Datachasers]

ive restarted the comic with no more than 5 panels per page that should help the loading issue
i tested it on a crappy laptop and dial-up connection and it seems ok
2 min verses 10 seconds -