Stranger in Brown

[W. Tungsten]

Hey, guys.

Stranger in Brown has been running for many months now, and I've come to a point where I think some real criticism would be very helpful. If you're a reader of the story, I would LOVE to hear your feedback. If you once did but stopped reading it, why? What do you like, or dislike? Interpretations? At least one thing to improve on for every two good things would be appreciated, since constructive criticisms can sometimes be the most useful.

I hope you're enjoying the story. There will not be an update this week, but look for one soon. Thanks!

[Dazmarne]

Hey, guys.

Stranger in Brown has been running for many months now, and I've come to a point where I think some real criticism would be very helpful. If you're a reader of the story, I would LOVE to hear your feedback. If you once did but stopped reading it, why? What do you like, or dislike? Interpretations? At least one thing to improve on for every two good things would be appreciated, since constructive criticisms can sometimes be the most useful.

I hope you're enjoying the story. There will not be an update this week, but look for one soon. Thanks!

Well, you already know that I'm reading it (and missing "Blossoming Jasmine"... I sure wish the author would give us more of that story!) but since you asked, I have to admit it's interesting just from a conceptual standpoint to look at Yiffburg in text-only mode. I'm so used to having Kat's episodes in ful color that just reading about Kit & Kay is a novel experience (pun intended). The story that you're writing is very obviously your own take on Yiffburg, so I can't be *too* shocked at things like theft being included... but I would like to just say (and I don't mean it as harsh criticism, just my own 2 cents) that if i were writing a fanfic, I wouldn't have gone quite that far. The character of Vagabond Vaughn is thoroughly original and just eccentric enough to be witty while not quite eccentric enough to be weird. It'd be hard to make a character who didn't yiff spending so much time in The Yiffiest Place On Earth a plausible state of affairs unless he was, and he is. I keep thinking that the story is eventually going to build to a climax (pun not quite as intended as before but still on the list) but even if it doesn't, it's been good for more than one wry chuckle and several shakes of the head in hilarious disbelief from at least one reader (me). ^_^

[W. Tungsten]

Firstly, thank you, Dazmarne, for your criticism!

Theft. It is alleged at this point, but completely intentional. I talked with Kat about it before I actually introduced it, and we agreed that this is only a Fanfiction, and I assured him I had a plan. I understand it's a major notion, but that is an element I intended to bring into the story from the very beginning.

I'm glad you're laughing! Vaughan is a good example of what eccentricity is to me, but he's a lot more, too. I even laugh, myself, sometimes at some of the things Vaughan says and the way he handles certain situations. I enjoy him too, and that's partly what keeps me motivated in the writing process.

Still, the story isn't just about Vaughan, nor do I see him as a main character.

Ha! No, the climax hasn't happened yet. I have often read over Stranger in Brown and thought "Man! this sure is taking a long time!" But any time I try to speed things up, it seems rushed, implausible, and a lot of opportunities get missed. The story is currently over fifty pages in length and growing, so it's best to take the story like you would a novel. Don't worry, the climax is coming and It will be a doozy! Everything to that point has been building up to it.

[Sethtriggs]

I happen to think it's very fun too, but am definitely going to keep reading as time permits, heh heh...

-Seth

[E_voyager]

looks to be a good story but poor kit. 100 bugers? my limite is around 50 box bugers.