Fletcher Apts: Fishing for Feedback

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Tue Apr 11, 2006 4:13 am

I finally decided to ask for some feedback/critique/whatever on my comic, Fletcher Apts. Any kind of comments, praise, criticism, improvements, opinions of any kind are appreciated. Thanks.

http://www.fletcherapts.com <--Warning: May contain furriness. (and some adult shtuff, but we're all mature here, right? Right?!

The synopsis: A bizarre little chunk of post-high-school life for three friends who share an apartment. Between playing in a band, dealing with women and learning to cope with responsibility, there is never a dull moment!

(alot of this stuff I have yet to get to, but it's coming, oh ho HO...IT'S COMING!)

Vorticus · Post by **Vorticus** » Tue Apr 11, 2006 8:27 pm

Not trying to be mean, but for feedback you're better off posting in Techniques, Tricks, and Tips.

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Tue Apr 11, 2006 8:39 pm

Vorticus wrote:Not trying to be mean, but for feedback you're better off posting in Techniques, Tricks, and Tips.

Really? Hmm, maybe I worded it wrong. This is a comic pitch, just with emphasis on 'feedback appreciated'.

This is where you advertise your comic and people can comment on it, right?

Vorticus · Post by **Vorticus** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 1:52 pm

Ah, I read too much into the feedback part. This is the pitch forum. I thought you were asking for a critique.

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 2:05 pm

Hm, I think I may have been a little bit too demanding of the feedback part now that I look at it. Probably scaring everyone away from reviewing, heh.

It seems no one is paying attention to this anyways, so I'll just re pitch again in a month or so. Then it will just be a comic pitch, nothing else.

Dutch! · Post by **Dutch!** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 3:19 pm

Read through your archive this morning. The style has definitely progressed. I like the way you put more effort into your shading and colours more recently. Some of the panels really look impressive. I looked past the furry characterisation, but it was tricky. That's just me though. I can say that for the most part you handled the animal faces pretty well. Not sure why the goat seems to have He-Man arms and legs though...

I found the content a little predictable though. Potty humour...science experiments to get the rent money...anything to do with sex equals funny...then the swearing came in and I felt detracted from the tone of the original strips.

So...I guess...artwise and layout wise, now that the text is typed, pretty good. It usually looks of good quality when you produce an 'official' strip. I'd think about making the speech bubbles completely on the computer though. The colour and style is becoming quite effective. Content wise though it is pretty much run of the mill stuff from what I've seen of this sort of genre.

I was wondering when you'd finally slip a bare boob into the strip too...

Good luck.

Cheers.

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 4:48 pm

Thanks for the review, Dutch!

Yeah I'll admit that the concept isn't all that original, and that it can be a little obscene sometimes, but that's the kind of humor that comes to me easiest. I'm hoping that I can produce a story that will set it apart a little later on, but of what I have now, I honestly think it does lack that compelling storyline that sets comics apart from mediocrity.

I'm glad you liked the art, since that's the part I concentrate on the most. I try to only use swear words when I think it's appropriate, like a band bantering at a live show, or to pull off a joke or two. Same with nudity. Otherwise, I keep those down a bit until they are needed. Some people of course don't like that stuff at all, as well as the furry aspect, and of course those people will never be readers. I'm glad you looked past most of that for an honest review.

Oh and that goat just works out alot. I don't know if I'd compare him to He-Man though.

Anyways, thanks for you thoughts.

Vorticus · Post by **Vorticus** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 6:03 pm

Okay, this time I tried to read more of it and I have to say the artwork is good and it's improving. That said I didn't really get far enough in to give good feedback because of the mature stuff, yeah I'm weird that way.

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 6:18 pm

Aw, that's ok Vorty. Thanks for trying. It's not for everyone.

*pats Vorticus on the head..er eyestalk...thing*

Gengar003 · Post by **Gengar003** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 6:41 pm

Longtime reader before the pitch, love it... um... more frequent updates = suggestion?

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 6:49 pm

Suggestion noted and approved. I'm trying, it just takes so damn long. *flails arms in air*

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 8:04 pm

I think it's neato. I'd remove the filler strips from the archive though.

That Brain Fuck one creeps me out.

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 8:09 pm

Heh, yeah I was thinking about removing the filler and perhaps making a new section on the site for random humor strips and filler strips. Is that even necessary?

I do want to take the things like one panel sketches and guest art and put them in the extras section though.

And I creeped you out?

Eeeeeexcellent!

edit: btw, I still owe you fanart. I haven't forgotten. Just busy.

TheSuburbanLetdown · Post by **TheSuburbanLetdown** » Thu Apr 13, 2006 8:13 pm

Heh, you don't have to make fan art. But I won't stop you either.

Yeah, putting random humor strips in their own section is good, along with any relevant explanations that may go along with them. Filler strips are also fun to have in between stories within the archive. They fit in the world of the comic, but don't have any real function in the story at hand.

Blackaby · Post by **Blackaby** » Wed Apr 19, 2006 12:44 am

I have checked out this before briefly, and the art looks good, but I'm really creeped out by furry things so I wasn't able to stay there for long - but it looks pretty.

Bookofbiff · Post by **Bookofbiff** » Wed Apr 19, 2006 4:47 am

I agree that your art is getting pretty good. The biggest improvement you can make at this point would be to the speech bubbles. I would suggest getting one of those templates with all the little elipses in it from an art store or move the bubbles to being computer generated like the text. Once you get that under control your strip will be giving off a pretty professional vibe.

-Chris

JTigerclaw · Post by **JTigerclaw** » Wed Apr 19, 2006 1:03 pm

Thanks you two for the comments.

I have wondered about the speech bubbles, and I've tried both ways and can't decide which one I like more. I'll probably try the computer generated way again sooner or later.