Please Critique my comic

ChibiJess · Post by **ChibiJess** » Tue Feb 28, 2006 4:49 pm

Ok - I've finally got the website into a rough semblance of what I'd like it to.

So - Critiques? Comments? Criticism? Cookies?
Also - please comment on the comic itself - I'm looking to improve and I've been experimenting with the different art styles and shading, though I'm not sure if I've finalized it or not.

Finally - and most importantly:
I can't get the CG adverts on the top - I've put the keentag for them in, and tried refreshing, reupdating, and retyping. I can't figure out what I've done wrong. I'm not trying to slight CG - you guys are great - but I can't figure out what's wrong and making it do that.

Thank you all!

Soldier Volkov · Post by **Soldier Volkov** » Tue Feb 28, 2006 5:20 pm

I would prefer the lines and outlines be smoother and less jagged. No shodow on the speech bubbles and a thinner outline for them. Attention is drawn too much towards the bubble itself and not the text. The transparant speech bubbles are also distracting. Also rethink the positions of your bubbles sometimes it's hard to tell which one is being said first. Think left to right, top to bottom. (the first voice should be placed above following voices)

Your art style looks fine to me. Only the back of the devil-lady's head is big. (chin is small). You seem to be going for an anime-ish look but you still need to watch the proportions.

Lastly the outlines of the characters should be slightly thicker, in my oppinion.

Keep it up. You'll get better.

ChibiJess · Post by **ChibiJess** » Wed Mar 01, 2006 8:01 am

Thanks for the critique. The speach bubbles bug me a bit, as I can never get them where they need to be, and when I do, the text doesn't fit

I'm not sure what you mean by the shadow on the bubbles - there shouldn't be one as I don't actively put one there... I'll look over how I do things.

I see the banner thing got fixed, so I'm happy about that. More critiques welcome!

ChibiJess · Post by **ChibiJess** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 1:33 pm

Sorry for the double post (several days apart) but...

*begs* Please critique me!

I know I'm not doing things right necessarily, but I want to know how I can get better. Please?

Jin-roh · Post by **Jin-roh** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 2:13 pm

The speech bubbles are the only problematic era I can think of off-hand. Its hard to tell what order I should follow them in.

I think you have a pretty clever concept. I'm envisioning a humerous spin on Dante's Inferno or Paradise Lost.

What is your update scheme? It seems your comic is fairly plot driven as opposed to the "joke of the day" type deal.

Black Sparrow · Post by **Black Sparrow** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 3:07 pm

I know you didn't want a critique... but there's one nitpicky detail here that doesn't have to do with style so much as learning that the problem exists.

It's a matter of ears.

The first one is what you have. Don't see the issue? That's fine. The second is what it probably should be.

See what I mean? The ear is positioned a little funny: like it's connected to the cheekbone, when it should be closer to the back of the head. Just something to look out for in future comics.

Overall, nice comic. The story shows promise, and I expecially like your layouts.

ChibiJess · Post by **ChibiJess** » Tue Mar 07, 2006 3:55 pm

Thank you

The comic updates every Saturday. I've managed to keep that update schedule for the past four weeks. Previously, I had been doing a Tuesday/Thursday update, but this was causing me to burn out big time, and I felt guilty for not updating when I should. I'm keeping with the Saturday updates while school is on - possibly switching to Saturday/Weekday updates once summer arives.

Thank you for the critiques. Please - more are welcome!