A Comic I Hope You Like, Someplace Else

Banov · Post by **Banov** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 2:58 pm

Hey, this is actually the 2nd time I've pitched my comic. However, there have been a lot of changes snce my last pitch, and I hope that everyone will like my comic better now than they did before!

So, for the link:
http://someplace.keenspace.com

Please take a look and tell me what you think ^_^

Bass Master Fei · Post by **Bass Master Fei** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 3:08 pm

Well... *scratches head*...I guess it's not bad. It's just that there are an awful lot of video game comics, and I've heard most of these jokes before. In addition, you might want to tone down the color brightness; it's a little hard on the eyes.

As of now, there just isn't that much that distinguishes it from other comics (I myself have this problem). Keep at it and see where it goes, I guess.

Sketch286 · Post by **Sketch286** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 3:57 pm

always have navigation buttons at the bottom, ya know, if you're gonna do an end instead of the side. it just gets annoying to scroll back up, mostly if you're going through archives

Oualawouzou · Post by **Oualawouzou** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 4:01 pm

The art has gotten better, although there's room for improvement. The hand-made coloring looks rushed at certain places (the gun close-up on January 26t, as an example), and the computer coloring is way too bright, but I think you're on the right track. I definitely see an improvement over the last time you pitched your comic.

Nit-pick: it's "shield", not "sheild". I spotted a few other typos here and there. I'm not sure if I'm closer to the exception or to the norm, but typos and such always irk me.

Ferguson · Post by **Ferguson** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 6:40 pm

I don't know if you should be pitching when your current comic is a "filler" page.

LibertyCabbage · Post by **LibertyCabbage** » Wed Feb 09, 2005 6:41 pm

I like the switch from computer graphics to hand-drawn. The first thing I noticed was that you don't need so many movement lines =/ You only need a couple. The action's done pretty nice, although you should make the characters look more interesting, instead of just normal guys in t-shirts and jeans (hell, give them cool looking armor as a start.) Also, sorry if I'm sounding too demanding, but it seems like you should be able to draw enough strips to update bi-weekly. I understand if you're busy, but I think as an action-based comic it would move too slowly if it was only once a week. And as Fei said, there ARE a lot of video game comics so you really need to work hard on yours to make it stand out from the others.

I think there's potential in your comic and I'll check it out now and then to see how you're progressing.

-LC

Anywherebuthere · Post by **Anywherebuthere** » Thu Feb 10, 2005 1:56 am

Bass Master Fei wrote:Well... *scratches head*...I guess it's not bad. It's just that there are an awful lot of video game comics, and I've heard you might want to tone down the color brightness; it's a little hard on the eyes.

Posh, I have to many cones, burning a few out is perfectly acceptable if you asked me.

I kid, I kid.

Honestly, I like the hand drawn stuff. Keep working it.

Banov · Post by **Banov** » Thu Feb 10, 2005 2:10 pm

^_^ I'm glad most people have good things to say. Below are my responces to some comments:

you might want to tone down the color brightness

I have recieved a LOT of complaints about the computer-colored ones being too bright, but do you think the hand-drawn ones are too bright as well?

always have navigation buttons at the bottom, ya know, if you're gonna do an end instead of the side. it just gets annoying to scroll back up, mostly if you're going through archives

Done!

Also, sorry if I'm sounding too demanding, but it seems like you should be able to draw enough strips to update bi-weekly.

You don't sound demanding at all. There is no way I can do that now, but the majority of my workload comes from....school! So from early June to late August when I have summer break, I may be able to make 2 comics a week instead of just 1.