Red Zone: Sci Fi Ghost Story?

[Moonshadow]

Since it's been nearly a year since I pitched in here, and in that time I've (gasp) added a whole new chapter... well, more than that, but currently I stand at two chapters and a prologue, with the third starting in two days.

Preview image:

Real comics are bigger and clearer. ^_^ Just downsized for the purposes of posting here without killing any connections.

Description: On the space station Eri-Aku, a war between the corporation Strathmore-Aldebaran and the residents of the station is about to escalate. Only one man has the power to stop this war, and he's already dead.

Site: Red Zone

Feedback is welcome, as long as it's not on the shifting art style. ^^;; I do keep playing with it, I openly admit that, and I'm falling into one I like, which is different slightly from what's there, but even if I weren't doing that, over the course of over a year drawing these characters it would have shifted anyway. And yes, I know I can't draw hands, I'm working on it. >.< Anything else is good as long as it's constructive--can't do anything without the hints on what to do.

[Kevin Wolf]

I don't generally read manga-style comics because I'm a bitter, mean old bastard that way. However, you have a good, if not completely original, premise (Escape from New York-ish). Your backgrounds are very nice, though the characters themselves seem a bit stiff at times.

Since your comic is a continuing narrative, I would take all of your one-shots, pin-ups and fan art and stick them on a separate page. They really interrupt the flow of the story and are just plain annoying. I would also reccommend relying less on "voice over" and show, rather than tell, more of what's going on.

I only read a bit of the first chapter, but there is certainly quite a lot of potential there.

[Moonshadow]

I appreciate the feedback, thanks ^_^ (And the narrative does pretty well go away after about the first half of the first chapter, I'll try to make sure it doesn't come back too much. ^^)