Constructive criticism

RPin · Post by **RPin** » Sat Jun 12, 2004 4:55 am

Terotrous wrote:Yeah, Al gives really good reviews. I'd sign up for one myself if the queue wasn't 60 weeks long.

I'll guess I'll just finish another few storylines and ask for critiques again in TT&T. No one ever gets tired of that. And there's a good chance with all the new people around I could get some who haven't read it before.

Actually, it'll be fun to see what people have to say about my comic one year from now (given webcomic weview will still be around by then, and I hope so).

Alschroeder · Post by **Alschroeder** » Mon Jun 14, 2004 2:17 pm

ruxen wrote:
alschroeder wrote: Now, if I just made the best COMICS ever...*Grin*---thanks!---Al
What are you talking about? I love your comics!

Thanks! I like YOURS, too! ---Al

Bekka · Post by **Bekka** » Tue Jun 15, 2004 3:44 am

Since you have already been told quite objectively what doesn't work in your comic, I'll tell you what I think works.

I like the way you constantly change camera angle, in some panels.

e.g.
http://mahosignature.keenspace.com/d/20020612.html
http://mahosignature.keenspace.com/d/20030320.html

I think that it's something you should keep doing in your future work. Your eye for colour is good too, keep colouring your panels like you did in the first ones.

My advice to make your stories more clear would be this: before you draw the actual comic draw a storyboard with dialogue and stickfigures and get a friend to read it. Tell them to ask you EVERYTHING that they don't understand, and use their comments to rearrange the dialogue, the characters shown, etc. Show the amended storyboard to someone else and repeat until satisfied that people can follow the story, then draw it.

Arumo · Post by **Arumo** » Tue Jun 15, 2004 11:53 pm

That is a very good suggestion, Bekka, thank you very much. I'll try that with my new stuff until I'm satisfied. I've been reworking the old stuff, with the color and dialogue; etc. So maybe when I'm done redoing the series with color in trouble spots and text in confusing areas people will understand the story more and somebody will ask... "what happens after this" to me and I'll start the series again.

Dutch! · Post by **Dutch!** » Sat Jun 19, 2004 5:11 pm

How about you just ask yourself 'Do I like the characters? Do I want to see where they go? What they get up to? Do I care if they disappear into the background? I mean, enough to spend a few hours every now and then drawing them?'

If the answers are (mostly) yes, then keep going.

Arumo · Post by **Arumo** » Mon Jun 21, 2004 4:17 pm

That's nice Dutch. Well unlike a lot of people though who does their comic for themself and for entertainment value there was going to be something more to mine. But if the comic is so horrible as obviously stated by some people then I'm obviously not getting the audience that I need in order to succeed in my cause. It's not just the point of drawing something and telling a story. Hopefully when I'm done redoing the already done pages the point will become more clear and I'll continue the series then.
I'm sorry if I sounded rude. I do very much appreciate your comment.

ZOMBIE USER 19235 · Post by **ZOMBIE USER 19235** » Mon Jun 21, 2004 6:14 pm

hmm the link to your site seems to be broken, but that may just be my stupid mozilla

did you do your avatar? if so i think that your drawing style is very cute! I am not sure what your storyline is about yet though, but my personal opinion is that if YOU like it and are getting ENOUGH feedback that satisfies you on your comic then you should continue. However, if you don't get enough feedback you may need to make some changes. But I can't really say anything, since I dont know what your story is about

could you please explain it to me ?

Arumo · Post by **Arumo** » Mon Jun 21, 2004 9:22 pm

You like the cuteness? YAY. So many people have told me to dump it.

I can draw stuff like Marvel and other things too, but how fun is it if you have to spend so much time doing just one picture? I wanted to draw a story with toxic cuteness contradicted by its overly serious storyline. Oh, I did my avatar too

It was the first cover to my comic.
Well lemme see... since you can't access the site my story is about a depressed boy who ends up in a different world with some of his friends. Then he has to be a decoy Goddess in order to postpone a world war. That's the skinny anyway.
I only really only got one person who wrote me a positive letter that said keep up the work. So hopefully with my re-do of the comic more people will read it and understand it. Then maybe I'll continue the series. So until then I put up a spoof series where my characters live in the present and rob banks and stuff while fighting against evil.

Dutch! · Post by **Dutch!** » Mon Jun 21, 2004 10:45 pm

Yeah, or you could just do that!

Arumo · Post by **Arumo** » Tue Jun 22, 2004 1:16 am

You mean the spoof? It's only a short spoof. It's about 50 pages long. I uploaded the first 30 but I left 10 more pages in Cali and I haven't finished the spoof yet.

Arumo · Post by **Arumo** » Thu Jul 08, 2004 2:13 am

starblinkz wrote:hmm the link to your site seems to be broken, but that may just be my stupid mozilla

did you do your avatar? if so i think that your drawing style is very cute! I am not sure what your storyline is about yet though, but my personal opinion is that if YOU like it and are getting ENOUGH feedback that satisfies you on your comic then you should continue. However, if you don't get enough feedback you may need to make some changes. But I can't really say anything, since I dont know what your story is about could you please explain it to me ?

Maybe you can't visit my site because of the spyware going on lately. Well, hopefully keenspace will have that taken care of and you can tell me what you think later on.