Okay, somebody else is doing this too, but I've been meaning to read this comic for a while, so...
Sorry for taking so long with this; reading throught the archives took a while. Here we go:
This is definately the comic's strongest point, and a very strong one at that. The art starts out pretty, but stiff; the rendering of the characters is always great, but in the first two scenes or so, the action seems oddly awkward, but that is a problem that is solved over the course of the archives. In the more recent comics, the artwork is simply beautiful and very dynamic in the action sequences. I'd like to specifically point out your shading, which is simply amazing and your use of backgrounds. In many comics of this type (manga-inspired fantasy setting) that I've seen, the artist rarely puts in any sorts of background more detailed than an array of sweatdrops. Not so in 'Feyenne', where, while backgrounds are not present in every panel or even every strip, those that ARE there are wonderfully detailed and well drawn. Bonus points for that!
'Feyenne''s story is definately interesting, if you look ignore the comprehensability problems (see next paragraph). Sure, a lot of it might be traditional fantasy fare, but from what I understood of it, the plots seemed very fresh and and new to me, a rather inexperienced fanatasy reader. I say plots, because as it is, 'Feyenne' seems to consist of a lot of small plot threads weaved together rather than having one overarching story, and while they are a bit hard to keep track of, most of these plot threads are great. Liam's story and the legend about the royal sacrifices in particular had a huge impact on me, and I'm sure some of the other stories will turn out this way too, once I figure out what is going on in them.
That was probably spelled wrong, since I'm tired as heck right now.
Anyway, this gets it's own paragraph because it is the single most glaring problem I had with 'Feyenne': As good as the story might be and as enviable the art is, a lot of the time I quite simply didn't understand what was going on in the story at all. On the less serious sides, there are some instances where panel layouts or internal monologues without any clear notice of who's speaking make it hard to figure out what is going on. (here
is an example; I had to re-read this page several times to figure out the sequence the panels should be read in). These are technical problems and will probably sort themselves out with time - I did find the newer pages techically slightly more understandable. In other instances, the pages are structured so that you simply have no clue what is going on (this
page made absolutely no sense to me whatsoever) and have to rely on understanding the situation from the dialogue in the next couple of pages.
Couriously enough, the sequences that were the easiest to understand were the ones that were simply text accompanied by text - after reading 'Feyenne' for a while, I started to look forward to those sequences, as I knew that they would sort things out that didn't make sense in the comic. You say somewhere on the page that you're more of a writer than an artist, and for once, that is actually correct. Or rather; you have great skills with both words and art. Your problem seem to be combining the two and tell stories with sequential pictures: comics.
Please keep in mind that I am not criticizing your story or concept - in fact, I really like your story - but the way the story is presented makes it really hard to understand and enjoy, which I find is a deep shame.
They have outrageous hair!
No, actually, the characters of 'Feyenne' are rather likeable. Keffria, Galad and particularly Liam are all nicely designed and developed without ever becoming outright stereotypes. I'd like to see a little more fleshing out on Keffria, since she seems a little less defined than the other two, but that might just be me. One problem I had with teh character department, though, is that like with the comprehensability problems, the reader (me) has a hard time keeping track of who, what and even where characters are. Especially the two demons made me go 'WTF' when they suddenly appeared without any introduction or information on who they were only to stay along for one page and then disappear for what, half a year? I realize that you might have done this to give them an air of mysteriousity, but just a snippet of information, either on what they were or how they were connected with anything would've been nice. In fact, it took me several minutes to realize that they weren't the elves from chapter one. In a similiar vein, the story with Tristan (is that his name?) and Galad and Keffria's childhood didn't make any sense either. Again, I know it's supposed to be mysterious, but I was mainly wondering who these characters were (I though the sister was Tristans mother for the good part of a page, and I'm still confused about Galad and Keffria's relation to that family. So, Tristan is Galad's brother? And Keffria grew up with them? Right?) you also have some minor problems with characters looking alike (I still can't quite tell the demons and elves apart), but that's nothing serious - most character are very distinct and nicely designed.
Nice, simple page with plenty of features. I like how the layout is and background colors are kept simple so they don't distract from the comic (which could be a problem with a greyscale comic on a colorful background). As has already been said, though, the header image is very big and slightly distracting; not only does it load first and fill up most of the screen (and I'm viewing the page at 1024x768, I don't even dare think of how big the image would look in 800x600), it is also in color
, which at least for me screams "look at me, I'm important" when compared to the greyscale pages - the image distracts from the comic a bit. This could easily be solved by resizing it a bit though.
'Feyenne' has great art and a lot of potential, but confusing storytelling and panel layouts sadly make it hard for me to fully enjoy what looks like a really good story.
(Like with TGA, I hope you're not offended by this review or that it's too harsh. I actually really, really liked 'Feyenne' - that's why the comprehensability thing bothers me so much.