Wendybird wrote:I like the style. It's very rich and alive. It can be a little bit confusing, though. one thing that might help is leaving more room between the panels, so they're more clearly separated, and so we have room to breathe between all that color and movement that fills up the panels.
Alias Pseudonym wrote:...so is there anything I can do with the scribbles to make them less distracting for you?
Alias Pseudonym wrote:How far have you read? There are only 13 pages at this point... Do the last few, after I changed page format, still bug you?
Although I can't say any of these people are anyone I'd particularly want to befriend...
Alias Pseudonym wrote:Right, time to poke this thread, I think. I'm now one comic into the first official chapter and two comics into a new setting and a new layout system. The comic panels now default to a 3x3 grid to keep it simple, and will mostly have minor variations on that. Also everyone has new palettes, and I like to think it helps with the things-not-standing-out problem. So, any critique or feedback?
Lianweijun086 wrote:Yea, I appreciate the line work much more now than in the beginning. It really helps to distinguish the characters from the background. However, one thing that might work for you is make the lines WITHIN objects thinner. So for example, a tree. Maybe you could use thinner lines in the details, like branches, wood grain, leaves, but use thicker lines (about the thickness you have now) on the outer perimeter.
Also, the linework doesn't seem to be "consistent." I know it's supposed to be a little scratchy, but it just varies A LOT from panel to panel. Take your last update, for instance. If you look at the last 2 panels, the linework looks completely different. In the second last panel, the lines are pretty smooth. However, in the NEXT panel, the strokes are all over the place.
I know the scratchiness is all part of your style, so I don't intend to have it changed. But I think you should consider a sort of conformity. The more consistent you are, the more it looks like you're in control. With a scratchy style, it's imperative that you assert your dominance over the lines. Otherwise, it kind of just looks messy in a bad sort of way. As if you're NOT doing it on purpose.
Hope that helps!
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