Read Robin's review of my comic - very helpful stuff that I'll be trying to work at. ^_^ A few (well, okay, more than a few) points:
Coloring/Shading: Pencil sketch along with black inking using a computer. Every comic until the more recent stuff (except for character pages) was done in Paint Shop Pro and I noticed how jagged the inking was in comparison to Photoshop, which I feel has smoother paintbrushes. All the recent stuff (stuff that hasn't shown up in the comic yet) uses Photoshop. On the same level, I am aware of white casting shadows. ^_~ It took me a bit to figure out that I needed to make the white a light grey so I could actually use a burn/dodge technique on it.
Drawing: Yep, you got me on my proportions. The examples you did give (ESPECIALLY the Darkbringer one) are not my finest works and after some talks with other forum members I'm working on correcting that. I will disagree, though, on one point. IMHO, breasts ARE a "W" shape. A disconnected, rounded one, but a similar shape, nonetheless. Heck, even the red lines given in the example resemble the edges of a rounded W... of course, that's probably just my opinion. For example, the female figure here:
http://www.mangarevolution.com/tutorial ... rial_id=68 has breasts that resemble a W to me, albeit with sections removed appropriately. Sure, the framework doesn't have it, but I admit I haven't tried to draw a female in this style just yet...
Writing: I have recently discovered to myself that the comic does sometimes read like a novel heavy with prose and am attempting to correct that. It's harder for exposition in some areas, but I will try to make less text for the reader to consume. And yeah, it does often preach my philosophy. I take no shame in admitting that. I also feel uncomfortable about cutting down the inner monologue. Lightbringer is the focus of the series and, subsequently his thoughts about the situation around him are important for that, along with reminding the reader of why he does what he does. However, I will take care to try to prevent him from repeating himself from one storyline to the next. One question, though - aside from a few pages where the speech bubbles were done in Photoshop and not PSP, all of the speech bubbles have black lines around them. Do you mean they should be thicker?
Site: You're not the first to comment about the idea of having a Home button. I suppose I should finally give in on this, but to me it just seems to cry lazy on the part of the reader not to have to just select some words on the URL and go back to the homepage. It also means I'll have to redo the size of the buttons, because there are already so many at the top. I'm not sure what's causing the text glitch, because it's not intentionally supposed to be so huge. I will reduce the title box's size at the next opportunity, though. I will say that I've also thought about taking out the fanart filler from the main archive and I suppose I should finally get around to doing it...
In any case, like I said, thanks for the review! It was very helpful! ^_^
It seems he's prone to choosing comics from either extremes... well, so much it's only been comics he hates (in this thread anyway). I think that's what makes him seem a purely negative reviewer right now.
