sun tzu wrote:Figured I'd give some thoughts on the latest storyline.
Obviously the art has improved, but I'd like to focus on the writing.
I believe this was the best-written story so far. The tensions between Lightbringer and the FBI; chief Crane's conflict; most of all, Hanna becoming a true superheroine; all of that helped a lot.
I believe that the biggest weakness of this arc was the villains. Hardly a surprise - IMO, the villains were the biggest flaw of Lightbringer's writing since the first issue. At least this time they got credible motivation, so there's progress.
(And if you're wondering what my issue with those villains is...Well, breakdown:
Power Glove: Wait, so suddenly there's supertech in this world? And instead of being patented and used by corporations to make billions of dollars, it's used by a mercenary to act like a supervillain? I usually expect more genre-savviness from this comic.
Lacey...I'm sorry, but I can't take her seriously as a supervilainess. We're talking about a child with a knife.
Bruiser...Eh, not as bad as Lacey. At least he's an adult with useful experience.
Firedemon: Eh, he hasn't really shown any personality, so I guess I can't complain about that. I am a bit miffed that a superhero who makes "no killing" a central tenet didn't have any objection to destroying Firedemon, when he had no way of knowing if he was sentient or not.
Legato Sin: Worst offender. I'm sorry, but I can't read that origin story with a straight face.
Lady howdoyouspellthat: Eh, no major complaint there.
The Darkbringer: Not sure how he got the resources and connections to pull all of this off (or escape from prison without alerting anyone)...but there's still the matter that I don't quite get his philosophy.)
Huh. Ended up expounding a lot more about what I disliked than what I liked, when mostly I wanted to say "good job. Keep it up". Oh well.
Fair enough, and his backstory was never addressed in the comic, though it's always possible he'll be making a return later on. McFuzzhead didn't have much of a backstory beyond the mercenary angle and the gloves themselves, so I fleshed it out a bit on my own. Essentially, Power Glove was a rich tech-inventor, one of the higher-ranking employees of the IMD corporation (you know that symbol that sometimes appears on headsets and tech? That's them. They're also the guys who run one of the Seven Towers). While he was rich and highly intelligent, he was generally bored with life and none of the usual playboy thrills would get him excited. As such, after inventing the gravity-nulling gloves, instead of turning them in, he decided to give it a shot making money a different way - the mercenary life. With his life on the line and having new situations before him (anything from bodyguard work to assassination), he's enjoying himself more than ever. The outfit is an idea he had while on a job in Japan - the cape adds a new difficulty for him to overcome since it can get in the way and it gives him a dramatic appearance with which people can be terrified of or laugh at him through underestimation. He is, though, really pissed that the girl in purple stole his tech.
In fairness, Lightbringer isn't the one who killed him, and even then Hannah had no idea that three little pellets filled with fire extinguisher foam would kill it. Though I will say that Firedemon isn't truly alive since it has no capacity for free will. It will do as commanded until it's commanded to do something else. It has limited intelligence, but only enough for it to follow orders.
Really? I suppose so, though would it have been better if I had gone with Vinnie D's original origin for her with just robotic hands instead of the claws?
Check back in Issue 9. There's a scene where the Code Poet is checking her daily messages and the thing she sees is that a prisoner escaped and she's horrified by who it is. While Darkbringer orchestrated some things from prison (contacting Power Glove and the others, for instance), he left the prison in order to actually be there. Furthermore, while the Code Poet was called to testify in court, she mentioned there was another reason she came to Pharos City and Lightbringer interrupted her before she could say what it was. The file she's holding is Darkbringer's - she had come to warn him that he'd escaped. I deliberately set it up, though, to make it look like she was talking about Lady Analemma, but at no point did she say that Lady Analemma was ever in their custody.
Does that help?
Thanks! ^_^ Keep reading!
Wandering Observer wrote:I believe I asked you once, Lewis, if you felt you could make each of these villains round and well fleshed out within three issues. Now that you have completed the issues, do you feel you were successful?
You have some wonderful story that you've detailed in response to sun tzu. In the future I'd like to see more of that inside the story, and less of it explained elsewhere. It makes it harder for readers to follow it who read the comic long after it is posted.
As for villains, I have a few more things for you that have been jammed up in my creative processes for some time. When they do become unjammed, I hope you'll find them helpful.
As I said before, you're improving at a greater rate than I first expected. Keep it up. I'm reading Lightbringer for different reasons than I once did. And I can assure you that such is a very good thing.
Huh. So, when he says "I'm doing it for the money", he's BSing?
Yeah, but none of the good guys knew that.
Nope. The "celebrity pianist gets abducted by gangsters who replace her hands with extremely advanced robotic prosthesis, and becomes a supervilainess" would make me wince regardless of the shape of the prosthesis.
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