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Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 12:17 am
by SSJ3Gohan007
Panel 1: Super Saiyan 2 Gohan(Cell Game) appears in front of goku.
Goku: (Surprised) Who are you?
Gohan: I am Gohan, I am from the future, I am here to protect you from Cell!<P>Panel 2: Goku: (confused)Cell? What the heck are you talking about? If anybody needs protection its you, punk kid!
Gohan: Listen, we need to get out of here, your life is in danger!<P>Panel 3: Goku <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/frown.gif">angry)nope, your the one whose life is in danger!<P>Panel 4: Goku starts to charge a Kamehameha, when suddenly a mysterious tall green figure appears out of nowhere. Goku: KA!! ME!! Huh?

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 12:53 am
by Cdc2
Dragonball XP main page: <a href="http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/dbxp.ht ... html</a><P> <IMG SRC="http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/images/ ... xp0001.gif"> <P>The first DBXP strip is out. If you want to submit your script for the next strip reply to this thread. Any number of people may submit scripts.. but I can choose only one. <P>Because of time constraints, maximum number of panels per strip is FOUR(4) panels. You are free to take the story anywhere you want. Introduce your own characters, use old characters, or even get characters from other comics/tv shows/movies, etc. Let your imagination run wild!<P>For an example of how your script can look like, here is the script I wrote for #1:<P>------------------
PANEL 1
Goku is sitting underneath a tree.
GOKU: (Thinking) I'm bored.<P>PANEL 2
GOKU: (Thinking) Yup. Bored. B-O-R-... uh..<P>PANEL 3
VOICE: (Offscreen) Hey!
GOKU: ?
--------------------<P>Easy as Brumfield Pie.. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif">
<a href="http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/dbxp.html">Dragonball XP</a><p>[This message has been edited by cdc2 (edited 10-24-2001).]

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 1:39 am
by Kunhalpojo
Panel 1
Gokou looks up and sees a large object falling from the sky.<P>Panel 2
Large object lands right near Gokou and Gokou is shocked to see him<P>Panel 3
A large computer is set on the ground, flashing mysterious green and blue light randomly<P>Panel 4
Goku is somehow in a trance..
<Narrator>
Who is this mysterious man and what has he done to our hero..?

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 1:47 am
by Kunhalpojo
Update for above...
Panel 2
Large object lands right near Gokou and Gokou is shocked to see a white balding man standing right by it...<P>sorry for this little add-in wanted to add it in before but forgot to mention it.. hopefully someone can see where im going with this hint hint look at the title...

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 2:40 am
by Katsuhito
(I hope this is the right way to do this)<P>------------------
PANEL 1
Piccolo in usual weighted clothes stands beside the tree.
PICCOLO: So, it's you!<P>PANEL 2
GOKU: (Surprised) What?<P>PANEL 3
PICCOLO: (Thinking) This is the one I've been sensing?
GOKU: ?<P>PANEL 4
PICCOLO: (Thinking) His looks belie his power
GOKO: Hey, mister, what do you want?<P>--------------------

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 3:31 am
by Maxim48166
Panel 1
GOKU: Hello?<P>Panel 2
(Radditz and Turles are leaning on the tree trunk.)
RADITZ: Hello, brother Goku.
TURLES: Yes, hello.<P>Panel 3
(Goku backs away from the duo.)
GOKU: Oh, no! My evil brother and cousin come to steal my allowance again!

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 4:17 am
by Caliban
(First Panel)
(Mr. Popo runs in breathless and looking behind him as though being pursued.)
Goku: So it's you!<P>(Second Panel)
Mr. Popo: (startled) What in the name of sweet Jesus are you doing here, boy?
Goku: Well, what are YOU doing.<P>(Third Panel)
Mr. Popo: (sudden flash of insight.) Why don't we play a game, Goku? It's called "hide this package and tell that cop that's about to come over that ridge that Mr. Popo wasn't ever here.<P>(Fourth Panel)
(Mr. Popo tosses a small package over his shoulder as he resumes him flight.)
Goku: (confused) That doesn't sound very fun.<P>Note: If you don't want to use Mr. Popo, fine. Replace him with someone else. Yamcha looks like a pothead, so I guess that might work. I just think it's kind of funny when Popo act in a fashion as horribly stereotypical as he looks.<P>And if you don't want to have random drug references in a children's comic, than, dude, you're hopeless.

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 6:53 am
by Animefanz@aol
Probably WAY too late but:<P>Frame 1
*Krillin waves hi*
Krillin: Hey Goku. You bored?<P>Goku: Yup...<P>Frame 2
*they both look depressed*
Krillin: Me too<P>Frame 3
*they both look up at eachother*
Krillin: Hey! You want to shoot spitwads at the girls?<P>(Goku is excited)
Goku: DO I!?<P>Frame 4
*something explodes to the side*

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 7:20 am
by Kojini
Well, okay then, I'll get my script a shot.<P>Panel 1: <P>ChibiPiccolo is pointing a finger accusingly at Goku.<P>ChibiPiccolo: You, your in my spot.<P>Panel 2:<P>Goku has a puzzeled look.<P>Goku: Your spot?<P>Panel 3:<P>Piccolo: Yes, I find the shade and nearby stream good for meditation.<P>Panel 4:<P>Goku: YOU MEAN YOU TRY AND BE BORED!?<P>Piccolo:...

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 7:28 am
by Demecowen
Let try this:
Panel 1
sakura(street fighter alpha)
Sakura: what you doing?
Goku: Nothing.<P>Panel 2
Sakura: I'm looking for someone sparred with today. You look tough. Do you want to pratice fight?<P>Panel 3
Goku:(Thinking)hmm..I don't have anything better to do. Why not?
Goku: Sure
Panel 4
Sakura and Goku are in a fighting stance ready to fight.
Sakura: All right let see what you got!
Goku: No problem.

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 10:11 am
by Cdc2
DBXP #2 posted. "The GUY" got this one. Doesn't mean the other strips were bad. Hopefully those who didn't get their strips chosen the first time won't be to disheartened to write future scripts ^_^<P> <IMG SRC="http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/images/ ... xp0002.gif"> <P>DBXP main page: <A HREF="http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/dbxp.html" TARGET=_blank>http://saiyalings.keenspace.com/dbxp.html</A> <P>BTW: Because of space limitations I was forced to cut the last scripted line. Sorry Guy! <p>[This message has been edited by cdc2 (edited 10-23-2001).]

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 10:29 am
by E Sailor Whisker
Okays, I'LL try its nows!!!<P>Frame one:
Goku: Who's there? (looks around)<P>(from off frame) NOT OVER HERE!!!<P>Frame Two:
Goku: What? (Looks behind the tree. Sees Chibi-Piccolo trying to get his foot unstuck from some living, slimy, goo.)
Goku: Hey, you need some help?<P>Frame Three:
Chibi-Piccolo: No-ooo- (falls down in the goo.)
Chibi-Piccolo: HELP!!!<P>Frame Four:
(Goku is now attempting to help him out of the goo. He gets stuck in there as well.)<P>Frame Five:
(Chi-chi is walking by.)
Goku: HELP!!!
Chi-chi: (Looks at the strange duo in the goo, surprised, then giggles.) Okays!!!<P>
Okays, I'm done!!! You guyzes turn!!

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 10:38 am
by E Sailor Whisker
Looks like I'll have to re-do mine a bits!!!<P>Frame One:
Goku: Huh? You-you're goo! ey!
Shapeshifter: No, I'll be solid in a minute...<P>Frame Two:
(Chibi-Piccolo is running from a crazed Chibi-Washu, who's trying to get him to sit still...
Chibi-Washu: It'll all be over in a minute!!!
Chibi-Piccolo: WAAAAAAAAAAAAAUUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!<P>
Frame Three:
Goku: So, what's your name?
Shapeshifter: Mor-
(Chibi-Pic continues running right into the half-solidified Shapeshifter.)
SPLAT!!!<P>Frame Four:
Chibi-Pic: HELP! SHE'S A CRAZY WOMAN! SHE'S TRYING TO ZAP ME!-Ewww...What IS this stuff?!?
Shapeshifter: ME!!!<P>Frame Five:
Chibi-Piccolo: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Shapeshifter: Oh, come on, it's not THAT gross!
Chibi-Pic: NO! She's COMING!!!

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 11:12 am
by DaGreatGohan
Panel 1<P>A strange craft is flying out of the sky.
Sound: Hummmmmmmm<P>Panel 2<P>Craft crashes into the ground blowing everything around it away.
Sound: Crash<P>Panel 3<P>The wind from the blast blows Goku away.
Goku: AHHH!<P>Panel 4<P>Goku is crawling on the ground.
Goku: (thinking) I wonder what it is.<P>Panel 5<P>A view from the hole looking up at Goku. Goku has a curious look on his face.<P>

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 11:14 am
by ZiRta
Panel 1:<P>Goku (still on his place, looking around): Uh? Who is it?<P>Voice from the tree: ME GOOF! Would you please stop rubbing your lazy back in my trunk?!<P>Panel 2:<P>Goku (standing up, scratching his head apologetically): Oh... sorry. It

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 11:47 am
by THE guy
PANEL 1:
Goku standing and looking behind him.
Goku: Who's there?<P>PANEL 2:
The tree grows a face.
Tree: me.<P>PANEL 3:
Goku looking terrified.
Goku: WAHHH!! My greatest fear come to life! The trees are getting revenge for all those apples I picked!<P>PANEL 4:
The tree has turned into a man.
Man: No, no. I'm a shapeshifter.
Goku: Shapeshifter?
Shapeshifter: I change shapes. Like this.....<P>*************<P>btw ziRta, good script, I was gonna do that! That's the thing that popped into my head right when I finished reading the strip.

Posted: Tue Oct 23, 2001 11:57 am
by The Jester
PANEL 1
Goku looks behind tree, but sees nothing.
Goku: Huh...
PANEL 2
The same voice yells from behind him.
Voice: Hey!
PANEL 3
Goku swiftly turns, ready to fight.
Goku: Gotcha!
PANEL 4
Nothing is there.
Goku: What is going on?...
Panel 5
Up in the after life King Kai is laughing frantically at Goku.
King Kai: Oh, this is great!

Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2001 12:00 am
by Krillin928
I'll give this a try:<P>Panel 1:
Goku: So you're a shapeshifter, huh? Kinda like Puar and Oolong
SS: (thinking) Puar and Oolong?<P>Panel 2:
Goku: So why were you dressing up as a tree...and why'd you call out my name?
SS: I can't tell you why i was a tree, but I can tell you why I called you, who had dropped your little ball over there (points to 4-Star Dragon Ball on the ground)<P>Panel 3:
Goku: (goes to pick it up) Oh! My Dragon Ball!!
SS: Dragon Ball?<P>Panel 4:
Goku: (now holding the ball) Yeah, there are 7 of em', when you get em' all together you can make a wish!
SS: (thinking) I may have use for these "Dragon Balls"<p>[This message has been edited by Krillin928 (edited 10-24-2001).]

Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2001 12:08 am
by Radiodj19
i am a newbie
panel1:shapeshifter: you must be kakarott.
goku: no. i have no idea who kakarrott is.
panel2: shape shifter: you must be you look like a saiyan
goku: but I'm not.
panel3: you must be!!! (punches goku while he is saying that)
panel4: goku: (on the ground) what did you do that for!!! <P>why'll you are at it can you tellus what kind of stript you are looking for? like a funny one or something<P>------------------
goodbye.(puffs into smoke)

Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2001 12:21 am
by SSJ3Gohan007
Panel 1:
Goku: Why were you a tree?<P>Panel 2:
SS <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/frown.gif">Scared)I am hiding from #18, she is looking for me!
Goku <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/frown.gif">confused)Why is #18 looking for you?<P>Panel 3:
SS <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/frown.gif">Embarrased)Well because I kissed her on the lips, while she was sleeping!<P>Panel 4:
Off Screen: There he is!!!