StarGazed comics

Munchy · Post by **Munchy** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:00 am

finally brought to a shelf.
http://smackjeeves.com/viewsite.php?url ... ic_id=1082

Kris X · Post by **Kris X** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:09 am

Well, I only see one comic and nothing pitched but a link. Please have a comic before you pitch it.

Giving a few moments before lock, unless yeahduff sees otherwise.

Munchy · Post by **Munchy** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:59 am

sorry? its just the first issue, one comes out every week, i have 8 on the line up

, so do you like the comic?

CaptainClaude · Post by **CaptainClaude** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 1:49 am

the point of having more comics before you pitch is so that we can judge it accordingly. Can't really tell very well from just the one example.

But from it, I'd say that your pacing's a little screwy, what could be divided into three or four newspaper style strips is all rushed together.

Shinyhugh · Post by **Shinyhugh** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 3:30 am

Emm... Don't like it that much, no, sorry, as ryclaude says it seems very rushed.

Nutcracker · Post by **Nutcracker** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 5:51 am

Why is it so fast? I don't even know anything about the characters. appering/disappearing backrounds and so many font sizes and colors make it look ever more messy.

yeahduff wrote:Have an archive of comics before plugging. You don't want us judging you on a tiny body of work. It won't be fair to us, seeing as you just wasted our time, or to you, as we'll always remember you for not having much at your site. At least fifteen would be acceptable, thirty would be better, but you can plug with less. Just remember that the more the better. This means no teasers without the comics to back it up.

read the rules first?

Munchy · Post by **Munchy** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 11:24 am

it took me ages stupid heads!!
heresthe next part caus you guys are special comic lovas
fealing special? lol

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v621/ ... dpart2.gif

edit/yeahduff/ image way too big.

Post by **Mercury Hat** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:16 pm

When they say rushed, they don't mean how long it took you to make it, they mean the pacing of the comic.

...stupid head.

Shinyhugh · Post by **Shinyhugh** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:24 pm

First it's too big for a promo image, that should be a link (check the DON'T MAKE ME KILL YOU thread at the top of the pitching forum), it's twice as wide as it's allowed be & over the file size limit too. So you've broken like 3 or 4 guidelines now, you'll be lucky if the thread stays here...

Now, why are you saving as gif? Your colours have gone all funky as a consequence - you can see the sunset's all bollocksed up at the end of that comic. A jpg would be about the same size with adequate compression - and even if it's a bit bigger, your target audience will not be 56kers so it doesn't really matter.

Third, don't call us stupid heads you're looking for criticism & not understanding it. The development in your story happens far too fast, that's what people are saying. For example, you took about 5 or 6 panels to show the guy falling off the spaceship, which was good, then suddenly they're in the observatory. Granted you've said more later for that one, & I think the 2nd comic is better paced, but there needs to be some sort of transition between him falling out of the spaceship & then cleaning up & being sent to the observatory. In fact, if you'd just left out the last panel and left the observatory til the next strip, it would've been a lot better. And there was no need for the "what happened last time" bit, it was slightly confusing & had too much trying to happen at once.

Kris X · Post by **Kris X** » Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:49 pm

Try again next time when you have both an archive and manners not to call your potiential readers "stupid heads.". This thread is being locked before a flame war.

Have a nice day.