E and Mu - In need of a deep critique. Deep

[Dallawalla]

Hey,

I've finally drunk enough to post my "comic" here.

From the other boards on this forum ive noticed the people here are intelligent, but relentless. I expect no holiday from you.
I would like to know what you honestly think of E and Mu.

As of today I have 40 single frame humour/philo comics

http://www.eandmu.com

I would love critique on the collection as a whole, some I'm more proud of than others. I have been trying to make the comics more clear and less cluttered as of late.

This comic means alot to me, it is almost a diary, and it is set in my mind.
The characters are minds, or conciousnesses spawned inside mine.
Read my "about" page for more info.

Im both trying to get the word out there about it AND see how it can be improved.
The idea behind the art is that I'm trying to keep everything in the realm of ideas. So the art is there to set certain assumptions, that would be a pain to write out if the comic was just text. I don't feel there is a need for visual emotional signals, I really want most of the visualisation to be occuring in the mind of the reader.

but all that said, My mind is open and I will take all criticism on the chest and take anything convincing on (in a slow stubborn yet complying way)


Thanks everyone

[EvilFlea]

Good first comic. Always a good start.

[EvilFlea]

Like it. Change nothing. Except maybe put a clear link to the very first comic.

Linked and Stumbled.

[EvilFlea]

Plus I keep imagining your thread title is a euphemism.

This pleases me.

[RobertBr]

Experimental and inventive, you should always be applauded for that. I didn't find many of them particularly thought provoking or amusing (I had the feeling they were trying to be both). 27 Feb was good, but very little else and I wouldn't revisit. A key thing to make people hold with you and try and pluck the gems out of the dross is to ensure their first encounter is very good, make sure you have a clear link to the first panel (human nature, people want to start there) and then be fairly ruthless and weed through to pick out the real gems and don't be afraid to permanently remove some of the weak stuff (you can always retry the idea later in a different way). Try and make the first 5-10 panels something that is really going to impress and people are more likely to stick with you.

Robert

[EvilFlea]

Oh come on, what could be more thought-provoking than this?



Seriously. It's the sheer pointlessness of the cartoons that appeals to me. That and the construction from Greek letters and mathematical symbols.

[Montyandwoolley]

I like it, the style is simple and unique and the content is very good! keep it up!

[Montyandwoolley]

Fancy a link exchange?

[K-Dawg]

I liked some of the humour, mostly with that giant question mark thing who gives wisdom of the world. All of those I felt were spot on. Oh and those with the nothingness, those were good too. Otherwise the rest of them felt a bit lacking.

Art wise I don't like the look of most of the characters. I only say this cause they seem to blend right into the panel and the words. If you could I'd say figure out a way to have them stand out more. That's all I really have to say about this comic, well done.