Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

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Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby Warlordofnoodles on Mon Nov 01, 2010 11:48 am

So, I know some of the things I think is wrong with my comic.... I'm wondering if you all share my sentiments... Or if there are things further still that I can improve upon that I missed (heavily possible).

"Brother Swan" Is Fantasy/Humor, mostly, with violence in later chapters....
http://warlordofnoodles.comicgenesis.com


EDIT: sorry for the broken link, fixed now
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Re: Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby VeryCuddlyCornpone on Mon Nov 01, 2010 2:31 pm

pst- edit your post to take that last "//url" out of there, friend! It's coming up a broken link!
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Re: Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby Warlordofnoodles on Tue Nov 02, 2010 8:23 am

VeryCuddlyCornpone wrote:pst- edit your post to take that last "//url" out of there, friend! It's coming up a broken link!
Thanks for telling me^^ Fixed now
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Re: Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby [geoduck] on Sun Nov 21, 2010 12:10 am

Your art is good, but those big honking earrings are rather jarring, since it appears that you're cutting/pasting/deforming them into position. Unless it's a plot-point that they look out of place, I'd say steel your nerve and start drawing them, even if means you have to simplify their design.

And adding a cast page is always a good idea.
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Re: Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby Warlordofnoodles on Tue Nov 23, 2010 12:54 pm

[geoduck] wrote:Your art is good, but those big honking earrings are rather jarring, since it appears that you're cutting/pasting/deforming them into position. Unless it's a plot-point that they look out of place, I'd say steel your nerve and start drawing them, even if means you have to simplify their design.

And adding a cast page is always a good idea.


Thanks guy. Noted.

Learning how to fight with the HTML and whatnot. Making the cast page has been more trouble than What it should be^^0
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Re: Tear me a new one (fantasy humor Critique)

Postby [geoduck] on Fri Nov 26, 2010 3:20 pm

Warlordofnoodles wrote:Learning how to fight with the HTML and whatnot. Making the cast page has been more trouble than What it should be


Feel free to use mine as an example/template; you'd obviously need to change the pictures and text, but it'll give you an idea of what you might need.
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