Samuli wrote:You mentioned these yourself:
2. The text is way too small, I can't read it – or could if I REALLY wanted to but it's just too much effort. You are trying to fit too much text in too small a space.
2. Your hand lettering is also difficult to read because the letter spaces are too wide and the word spaces too shallow. You need to group letters in a word together and separate words from one another. EDIT: on closer reading, it's just inconsistent. If you're having trouble writing small, write big and scale it down to match. And use guidelines to keep the script steady.
1. The complaining box below the comic is preventing me from actually getting into the comic itself. Metatext not working here. The proper place for those kinds of notes are in your journal or here. When you are publishing stuff you really have to think: "What does a reader get from this?"
It looks as if the comic has promise but please fix these, so I can read it
Ohemgee wrote:The title is actually good, in my non-Portuguese opinion, because it's unique. you could add an English subtitle though or make it a bit smaller, so that people can quickly see English on the site as well (and not have to scroll down).
Ohemgee wrote:As far as consistent character design goes, it seems you've done alright, as long as the characters have very distinct characteristics (and the fact that your comic is in colour helps) like hair length and clothing styles.
Ohemgee wrote:Your profiles seemed to be alright as well, not too flat. It's a good idea to draw your characters in profile as well as from the front (even if it doesn't look quite perfect), so that you can practice drawing the face from these positions, and it also makes the comic look better overall with variety.
Ohemgee wrote:For my handlettering I use guides on photoshop and write slowly and as large as possible in the guides. Sometimes this means going back and erasing whole lines of text but it's worth it to make the comic readable (okay my comic isn't a great example of readability...)
Ohemgee wrote:One last thing. Switching between large many paneled epic story line and a sort of gag college strip (I presume) makes it a bit disjointed... I know it's still early in your webcomic and now you just need to accumulate an archive, but consistency in storyline will help new readers go through your archive without giving up.
Ohemgee wrote:Good luck!
Jin-roh wrote:It is my personal opinion that hand drawn text should be avoided whenever possible. I would suggest finding and using any non-comic sans font you can find. You can get them for free.
Jin-roh wrote:Your MYST comic was clever.
Crrash wrote:i just googled for "font for comics" and came up with this: http://www.blambot.com/font_digitalstrip.shtml. Does it seem good? btw. why do many comics write in all-caps? is it some readability thing?
Samuli wrote:Everybody's using blambot. They're good.
Samuli wrote:Oh yes, and you mentioned not remembering what people wear – take reference photos (or sketches). If you have a camera phone, nothing could be easier. Your friends probably won't mind.
Crrash wrote:well, i uploaded a newer version of the first comic and the newest. tell me what you think.
i wanted to change the comments i made to the comics, and also upload a newer version from the second comic, but it just won't let me. it says i don't have enough permissions to substitute the files... i'll look into that later though
mikemacdee wrote:The Myst comic suffers from "wall o' text". You need WAY more panels to accommodate all those balloons, otherwise you may as well just write a script and post that. You can fix it by drawing a panel for every pair of word balloons, which means you'd have to redo it from scratch, but it'll be better off that way anyway.
mikemacdee wrote:It's definitely better, but it would still benefit from being redone from scratch and without a copy-paste job. Making the joke more concise would help you a lot. The last part with the intern isn't really necessary: you could end it nicely with the "sucker" bit. You can definitely leave out the bit about the bad linking book considering if the editor frees Cyrus, he'll be trapped in his stead (which is more logical and pretty damn funny).
The comics need to be published in the different languages. So, that people who don't know English they could too enjoy the comics. As it is published only in some languages only, it gets limited to the people who can read those language. Comics should not be treated as looking as the rich people or the people of one specific criteria,but looking globally.
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