Now I've done it... a strip

[Lassek]

Hi,

I finally got around to scribbling the bubbles to a single strip I drew like... February? (who knows) I decided it was such a significant marking point, being so far my only one despite that I have rather clearly laid out plans for the comic of which this is the beginning, that having now acquired two (count 'em. I don't understand either) decent scanners I should post it. I've been a couple of hours a month for 1½ years now, I figure it's time for showing it...

It's in pencil, it had already smudged a bit (can sb tell me how to clean it up digitally?), it needs inking (which I can't, but I will) and I shooping (which I can't but I will),

Also I'm totally new at drawing word balloons and would be very grateful for any tips concerning them, nudge nudge, but

http://www.esnips.com/doc/da5026e8-b4da ... 16669/Woot There you go anyway. A few more recently discovered mistakes notwithstanding I'm quite satisfied with it. The panels are 9-10cm wide on paper because I'm kind of stupid; OTOH, I'm somewhat pleased about the fact that they don't look that bad even magnified. ::smoke

I have worked mostly on facial expressions and rather little on clothing. I also hate hands & fingers. I put some thought in panel rhythm, but I have a hunch I have no idea about the nuances in positioning speech bubbles.

Also I have low confidence on my ability to produce natural English. : (

I wonder to what degree any of this is perceptible through the strip?

What works and what doesn't? Any kind of feedback is appreciated, really...

[Nikara]

hmm well feeling lazy, so this is going to be short. Your comic has a lot of potential; I would suggest for the future that you ink your comics. Whether you add color or not is your choice. What I would expect in this comic, from just looking at one strip are: running gags, contradictory personalities, odd hobbies, and little, totally ridiculous adventures.

Anyways, good luck! I can't wait to see where you go with this. Post again when you have a few completed strips.