http://geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt.html
i'm new to keenspace and we haven't gotten our site yet, but i put a bit of teh comic on geocities so that we can geo some critique before we put it up on the keenspace account.
i'm well aware that i have no skill for building web pages. it sucks i know and i'm sorry.
it will be better when we get the keenspace account (i won't be the one doing it.)
and there's more to the story than you seen here, i promise.
so any comments, criticism,(positive and negative are both appreciated) stuff that yuo would like to see improves...ect ect.
thanks!
~Karlie
yet another looking for criticism
yet another looking for criticism
The Alias Project
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
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The first one needs thicker outlines and lighter backgrounds. The black skies get rid of what little ink you had around the people, and the colors seem to dig into the border.
Sometimes its hard to read the text (muh....killroy?). Just make the bubbles bigger is all.
I digged the couch on the second cartoon..... you deserve an attaboy. No, a super-attaboy. I'd go so far as a super-rad-attaboy.
It may be my personal preference, but I always tell people to stay away from Photoshop backgrounds.... they detract from the pictures drawn and are overdone by just about everyone else.
The girl with the long hair has a man's body. http://www.geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt2.html Her pants are also pulled up, or her stomach is wierd.... I dunno. It makes her look like a feminine Steve Urkel.
You should never have to tell people that your character is 'glancing around.' Just over-exaggerate and people will know what she's doing without even looking twice. If you want to have that look, draw her head from the front, then 45degree angles, then the two side-profiles. It looks goofy to the artist, but the audience won't give it a second glance.
Thicker word bubbles, please.
http://www.geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt7.html I don't know how to start.... there's too much of a contrast between Maurice and...... everything. At first I thought it was cut & pasted. You have to stay consistent with the detail / border / shading, at least on the same page.
Same with the Photoshop effects, don't draw in your backgrounds. You can always tell when somebody drew the oven or it was created with the line-tool. It seems to take priority over the overall weak lines of the strip.
Well..... that's all I can think of.... I hope to see more in the future!
-chris 'c'
Sometimes its hard to read the text (muh....killroy?). Just make the bubbles bigger is all.
I digged the couch on the second cartoon..... you deserve an attaboy. No, a super-attaboy. I'd go so far as a super-rad-attaboy.
It may be my personal preference, but I always tell people to stay away from Photoshop backgrounds.... they detract from the pictures drawn and are overdone by just about everyone else.
The girl with the long hair has a man's body. http://www.geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt2.html Her pants are also pulled up, or her stomach is wierd.... I dunno. It makes her look like a feminine Steve Urkel.
You should never have to tell people that your character is 'glancing around.' Just over-exaggerate and people will know what she's doing without even looking twice. If you want to have that look, draw her head from the front, then 45degree angles, then the two side-profiles. It looks goofy to the artist, but the audience won't give it a second glance.
Thicker word bubbles, please.
http://www.geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt7.html I don't know how to start.... there's too much of a contrast between Maurice and...... everything. At first I thought it was cut & pasted. You have to stay consistent with the detail / border / shading, at least on the same page.
Same with the Photoshop effects, don't draw in your backgrounds. You can always tell when somebody drew the oven or it was created with the line-tool. It seems to take priority over the overall weak lines of the strip.
Well..... that's all I can think of.... I hope to see more in the future!
-chris 'c'
*grin* it was cut and pasted^_^ ...and i think i will be redoing it, or at least fixing it. i had drawn the strip twice, adn i took the best panels from each. one was inked (rather thick) in brush pen, the other in ball point, so i got quite a strange contrast.
adn i'm still just learning to use photoshop...i haven't quite got the hang of coloring with it yet, buti'm getting better.
i got copic markers for christmas, so i mught start coloring the strip in marker. but that will probobly be a while, as i still have A LOt of work to do as far as my teqnique with marker goes
thanks for the comments^_^
adn i'm still just learning to use photoshop...i haven't quite got the hang of coloring with it yet, buti'm getting better.
i got copic markers for christmas, so i mught start coloring the strip in marker. but that will probobly be a while, as i still have A LOt of work to do as far as my teqnique with marker goes
thanks for the comments^_^
The Alias Project
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
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BunELovecraft
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hmm
Not a half bad start y'know? Now my only complaint is that it's reeeeaaaallly slow on dialup, how are you compressing your jpgs? Sometimes its easier to save 'em as gifs if there isn't much color detail and stuff.
--Yer doin' a right nice job on speed lines and on Mere's hair
--Perhaps you might want to make the speech bubbles with photoshop, they turn out cleaner that way
--Your coloring is pretty good, but using layers or perhaps a "multiply" function if you're using Micrographic would make it easier with less little white pixels ne?
Anyway, keep practicing, that's the only way you get better and hope you get that keenspace account soon.
--Yer doin' a right nice job on speed lines and on Mere's hair
--Perhaps you might want to make the speech bubbles with photoshop, they turn out cleaner that way
--Your coloring is pretty good, but using layers or perhaps a "multiply" function if you're using Micrographic would make it easier with less little white pixels ne?
Anyway, keep practicing, that's the only way you get better and hope you get that keenspace account soon.
http://www.onehouraxis.com
There is no emotion; there is peace.
There is no ignorance; there is knowledge.
There is no passion; there is serenity.
There is no death; there is the Force.
There is no emotion; there is peace.
There is no ignorance; there is knowledge.
There is no passion; there is serenity.
There is no death; there is the Force.
Just two things: First off, the writing on the shirt is never going to be perfect like that in real life, even if it's a really tight one. I know making writing on shirts look real is really hard, but give it a go.
And second which has been mentioned before, you need to work on your photoshop skills so that the presentation of the comicis up to scratch.
And second which has been mentioned before, you need to work on your photoshop skills so that the presentation of the comicis up to scratch.
omgwtf
thanks,
as you can tell, i'm still playing around trying to find a good style for inking. i've seen the thicker outlines work really well for others..but it dosen't seem to be doing the same for me. i'm just going to keep working with it and see what i can come up with.
i think i'm going to lay off on photoshoping backrounds and shading, and jsut use it to letter (my handwrithing is just above illegible). at least untill i improve my skills a bit (or a lot.)
^_^
as you can tell, i'm still playing around trying to find a good style for inking. i've seen the thicker outlines work really well for others..but it dosen't seem to be doing the same for me. i'm just going to keep working with it and see what i can come up with.
i think i'm going to lay off on photoshoping backrounds and shading, and jsut use it to letter (my handwrithing is just above illegible). at least untill i improve my skills a bit (or a lot.)
^_^
The Alias Project
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
new couple comics up. would anyone like to take a quick look and #12 and 13 and give me some feedback.
12 i used screentone to do most of the shading, and 13 i shaded with ink.
personaly, i think the tone looks better, but i'd like to hear what others think.
anyone??/
*edit: i can't type well normaly, and 24 hours no sleep hasen't helped that*
another edit.
http://geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt12.html
http://geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt13.html
12 i used screentone to do most of the shading, and 13 i shaded with ink.
personaly, i think the tone looks better, but i'd like to hear what others think.
anyone??/
*edit: i can't type well normaly, and 24 hours no sleep hasen't helped that*
another edit.
http://geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt12.html
http://geocities.com/lost_priestess_zaha/fgt13.html
The Alias Project
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.
http://drunkduck.com/AliasProject
"why when people tell up there are billions of stars in the sky, we believe them. but when we are told a wall has wet paint, we have to touch it to be sure?"
http://fangirltheater.keenspace.com - we said it was comming. here it is.