Could need some critiqe..

[fredav]

Hi! I´m new here and could need a little critiqe. Haven´t done any comics before, so there is probably things that can be improved.

Please tell me what you think!
And forgive my bad English.

[Still Life]

I really like the color palate those colors fit nice together. you have nice line work but maybe make it a little thicker around the characters? the yellow guys head almost gets lost in the the background sometimes... otherwise tis a great comic (but personally to serious for me ) hope that helps.

p.s. could you take a look at my first webcomic and tell me what u think? here's the link to that forum. thanks!
http://forums.comicgenesis.com/viewtopi ... 95&t=88513

[Lianweijun086]

Absolutely love the artwork. The story is pretty intriguing, too. Do you have a link? I wouldn't mind reading more ^^

[EvilFlea]

Like it a lot, and the English is fine in this one.

Only criticism, as above, is you could have *slightly* thicker outlines to the characters. Not too much, just a little bit.


Well done.

[BionicDance]

I REALLY like the colors; not a huge fan of drab-and-dreary, but you make it work even for me. That's...hard to do, so well done!

Not so intrigued by the story, tho...but maybe that's cuz it doesn't seem to have started yet; can't really judge on the basis of one comic.

[Menelaos]

I like the colors, but I think that I'm just repeating what everyone else is saying by that. Your first page makes me want to know more about what's going on.