Would Like a Critique

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 1:36 am

I did this illustration for my soon-to-be-relaunched comic (yep, the one in the sig), and would like a critique. It's a finished picture (or more like, I'm sick of working on it

) and I probably won't be working on it anymore, but I'd like to hear some advice - what works, what doesn't, how off is the anatomy, etc, etc - so I can do better on my next illus. Thanks!

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y246/l ... uerose.jpg

Close up:
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y246/l ... loseup.jpg

Dutch! · Post by **Dutch!** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 3:17 am

Struth.

That's really nice. Well done.

The thing that stands out for me though is her hand. The palm and especially the top of the wrist are too large. Looks like it's swollen almost. Cut back on the curve up from the wrist to the palm, and the width of the hand between the thumb and fingers. Otherwise...bloody impressive.

Cheers.

Maccait · Post by **Maccait** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 5:36 am

Very bloody nice work. *jealous*

I agree with Dutch about the hand being too bulbous. The lack of shading on the thumb, at the knuckle, also makes the thumb look a little deformed, like it's bending just the wrong way. And the left side of the nose looks just a little underdefined to me.

Other than that, it's a fab piece of work. I love the effects of the fabric.

Black Sparrow · Post by **Black Sparrow** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:12 am

Yikes. I just can't stop looking at it. That's gorgeous.

The only thing I'd have to add is that the shadows on her skin may be a little too light. Especially in places like the inside of the ear, in the nostrils, or under the chin. It's a little hard to pick out detail.

Then again, that's just being really picky.

DancingChaos · Post by **DancingChaos** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:23 pm

Woooooooooow... >_> That's so insanely good, I almost exploded in excitement!!! *explodes*

Anyway, I don't see anything that's wrong with it in any way... Your artwork is absolutely fabulous! *hugs artwork* You rock ^_^

And I will be reading that comic when it comes out ^_^

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:29 pm

Thank you for the feedback! I knew there was something off with her hand, but couldn't figure what it was. Definately will try to make it less swollen looking.

I also was going for a very light, watercolor look but it definately could use some darker shadows to add more contrast.

Rkolter · Post by **Rkolter** » Wed Jan 25, 2006 4:48 am

I'm sorry but you're too good. We can't have that level of skill concentrated in one place. It sets things off balance.

Christwriter · Post by **Christwriter** » Wed Jan 25, 2006 10:57 am

Oh my god you broke my brain.

FAR better than I could do. I can't critique this. Sorry, hon, all you get is "ooohhh, pretties".

CW

Subhuman · Post by **Subhuman** » Wed Jan 25, 2006 10:59 am

What others said about the hand. Everything else, especially the hair, is flat-out gorgeous.

ScrumYummy · Post by **ScrumYummy** » Thu Jan 26, 2006 11:02 am

beautiful. I noticed the problem with the hand, but everybody else has already talked about it, so I'll spare you having to hear it again

I'm running to check out your deviant, btw =)

Jeffy · Post by **Jeffy** » Thu Jan 26, 2006 4:13 pm

along with her hand, I noticed that the forearm looks a tad poofy, but that's just me comparing to her upper arm and face

That guy · Post by **That guy** » Fri Jan 27, 2006 1:43 pm

Phenomenal. Is the entire comic going to look like that?

Like they said with the hand... and also: her ear looks a tad large, like it's sticking out from the head. It's a matter of angle - the nose has the same problem, but to a lesser degree, almost negligible. With both, they look as though they are meant to be on a face looking more directly toward the right of the picture instead of tilted toward the 4th wall. They're individually marvelous, but they just barely don't mesh with the overall effect.

I'm very impressed, and even if you posted now with the problem spots people have pointed out, you would still blow the socks off of just about any webcomic reviewer... as long as you remember to put as much time in your writing as you put in your art. (That's where most pretty comics fail).

Dutch! · Post by **Dutch!** » Fri Jan 27, 2006 1:48 pm

What's wrong with big ears?

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Sat Jan 28, 2006 12:50 pm

Thank you everyone! Again, your feedback and advice helped a lot. I did a little tweaking here and there, and tried to fix the problematic areas as best as I could (if only I hadn't flattened the layers beforehand *sigh*). Alas, I don't think I can work on this anymore -really must be working on the comic now- but I do hope that it looks somewhat better?

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y246/l ... erose2.jpg

That guy wrote:Is the entire comic going to look like that?

Unfortunately no, it's much too time consuming. Therefore I'm only going to be coloring like that for the chapter covers and promo stuff.

The comic itself will look more like this: http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y246/l ... on0003.gif

I'm actually debating whether or not I should continue doing it in yellow-ish gray and red or just leave it in grayscale. Mostly because I'm a little worried that the red is too distracting. But I do think doing the comic in semi-color is more attractive... What do you guys think?

ScrumYummy · Post by **ScrumYummy** » Sat Jan 28, 2006 3:49 pm

That's gorgeous work...I like the different tones as opposed to greyscale, I think they add "a little something," bring a little life to it.

Dark Spider · Post by **Dark Spider** » Mon Jan 30, 2006 11:23 am

I have never done this before, but I must ask you....can I have that as a wallpaper, seriously?!?! I just love looking at your artwork, its gorgeous.

Jackhass · Post by **Jackhass** » Mon Jan 30, 2006 8:58 pm

Go away you! You're stuff is better than mine...I don't want the Comicgen competition!

Corgan_dane · Post by **Corgan_dane** » Mon Jan 30, 2006 11:07 pm

I can't comment on that picture...it's way better than anything I could pull off.

It's be like the pot calling the kettle purple...or something....

Suika · Post by **Suika** » Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:22 am

Dark Spider wrote:I have never done this before, but I must ask you....can I have that as a wallpaper, seriously?!?! I just love looking at your artwork, its gorgeous.

Sure, go right ahead!