Escushion wrote:Thanks for the feedback. Just a quick question: Do you think I should have some sort of expositional text between the cover shot and the real first comic?
No, no exposition, I like the start and the intro of Kadeo. I just think the shoot out takes too many comics to accomplish, but there are people who probably love them, so I'd worry only about what you like and possibly your fans.
Banner: I think you could improve it by putting the title at the end though, between the flashes of Teddy's face and the beginning.
Duly noted.
Site: The one problem I had was that I couldn't find the comic at first.
Ah, hadn't realized that. Okay, maybe I can move the New iframe and vote buttons, etc down some.
Art: Teddy looks great.
I think you have an affinity for Kadeo (i am spelling that right?). You like to draw him, have fun with his character. I think I feel the same way about Teddy. He's deliciously evil in all the right away.
Lucy could use some work. Her facial expressions are spot-on, but her body bends a little weird, a little too stiffly.
Also duly noted. I did notice at one point that she started off pretty small, fairly stiff and then seem to grow. I'm expecting such things to smooth themselves out as time goes by.
I like the color-work too, as what I did to an extent with my comic, where certain colors pop out of the black and white.
See "Schindler's List".
Also, I know it's early so maybe this will change, but I think it's really cool that you don't see the adults at all. [/quotes]
Very influence by the adults in "Peanuts".
One thing I'd improve though is taking the asterik uses out of the dialogue bubbles.
Also duly noted. I'll play with sound FX styles.
I don't know if he's an Anti-Christ though; honestly I think he's got the right idea with Uncle Jerry
Who said Teddy was the anti-christ? muahahah. no, but seriously, Teddy Bear Anti-Christ had a good ring to it. Easier to remember rather than just Teddy or Teddy & Lucy, etc. though it might alienate a certain crowd, but I figure those people won't appreciate the humor anyway.
Mucho Appreciado for everything.
tbac