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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2001 12:02 am
by Roscoe
Glych's advice has turned fruitful, I present <A HREF="
http://www.slo-span.org/onv1.gif" TARGET=_blank>
http://www.slo-span.org/onv1.gif</A> as a preview of what may be...<P>Please, tear it apart. After acquiring a girlfriend my ego is in serious need of deflating.
Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2001 11:45 am
by Notglych
A glych cretique:<P>The art and style is cleaned up immensly, it's readable and well balanced, as for the set up, I recommend adding a X to sepperate the panels....uh..."cross"...<P>As for the story, it's funny! I like it, but I think this particular comic should be a week into the strip rather than it's pilot. We need to know and get used to the characters first.... Who are they? they have no names? what job is person 1 applying for? who exactly is the manager/person 2?<P>You need to show and introduce the characters first. Maybe show that she has money problems or is paying for college....<P>just my 2 cents<P>-glych uh! er...Not glych! not glych!
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