Damonk wants YOUR poetry!

Postby Damonk13 on Tue Nov 21, 2000 11:43 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Coota:
<B>Hopefully he already saw mine and is already sending a critique. Undoubtebly.
</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Heh. I had a bit of free time tonight (i.e., I needed a break from my Shakespeare research!), so I actually went and did yours up. <P>I hope I won't receive any letterbombs. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/wink.gif">
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Postby Damonk13 on Tue Nov 21, 2000 11:51 am

Originally posted by Ucchan:
<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR><B> <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/eek.gif"> Cool! What are the poems? What have they been published in?
<HR></BLOCKQUOTE></B><P>A few academic literary journals, most recently <B>The Windsor Review</B>. <P>A tiny smattering of chapbook anthologies.<P>An e-zine or two.<P>etc. etc.<P>I'm far from the big time, but I'm slowly jamming my foot in the door... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif"><P>As for what my poems are, I didn't want to impose my stuff upon you all... This is a thread to let you all showcase YOUR wonderful poetics to me and the world! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif">

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR><B>
When I find some of my old poetry, I'll post it.
</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Good. I'm looking forward to reading it.
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Postby Damonk13 on Sat Nov 25, 2000 9:36 am

Barring any major complications, Pyro and scrubbo should get critiques tomorrow at the latest.<P>Is there anyone else I missed? I think only 3 people so far have asked for my opinion... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif"><P>And, dammit!<P>I want to see <I>more</I> poetry here!!!<P>How else am I supposed to steal your ide~~ err, get <I>inspired</I>???
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Postby Scrubbo on Sat Nov 25, 2000 12:21 pm

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by damonk13:
<B><P>How else am I supposed to steal your ide~~ err, get <I>inspired</I>???</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>AHA! You scaliwag! Scurvey dog!<P>Well, be careful if you steal poetry from me. It might get you slapped by somebody! (Although I've only been slapped once for a poem, but I had earned it.)<P>I have another Haiku, but you'll have to wait for it to show up in my strip. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif"> Henry Rollins is so damn inspiring!<P><P>------------------
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Postby Michael on Mon Nov 27, 2000 3:26 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by damonk13:
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(Damn University, forcing me to write Term Papers!!)</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>
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Postby Damonk13 on Mon Nov 27, 2000 12:17 pm

Sh**.<P>Sorry I'm late Pyro and Scrubs.<P>If it's not finished by tomight, it will be by tomorrow night, I promise.<P>(Damn University, forcing me to write Term Papers!!)
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Postby Matt Trepal on Tue Nov 28, 2000 5:54 am

There was a young shepherd from Crete,
Who thought he was being discrete.
When his friends went to town
His toga came down
And the whole island heard his flock bleat.<P>That's from <B>Plato: The Limericks</B>. It's some of his earlier work, and admittedly not the best-known. Perhaps more will show up when I can get it translated.<P>------------------
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Postby Damonk13 on Tue Nov 28, 2000 9:31 am

Pyro, your critique has been sent.<P>Scrubbo, your haiku is next.
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Postby Damonk13 on Tue Nov 28, 2000 10:06 am

There. Now Scrubbo's critique has been sent.<P>That's it for critique requests so far folks.<P>If anyone else wants to offer poetry to be critiqued, take the opportunity while it's being offered! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Scrubbo on Wed Nov 29, 2000 2:28 am

Cool Damonk! That's for the critique!<P>Okay, here's a new haiku for you. This time I'm attempting to jam my thumb here, and stick to more visual images....Heh heh.<P>Here goes :<P>fingers guide pen
strokes of inky muse blooming
stains upon fingers<P>*cringe*
I hope I did better on this one! ^_^<P>I'll try something new for my next attempt at poetry.<P>------------------
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Postby Scrubbo on Wed Nov 29, 2000 4:47 am

And back for round _4_ of bad Scrubbo Poetry......<P>My attempt at a Word Sonnet, inspired by Damonk himself. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif"> He's quite good!<P>Two poems. I like the first one, but I'm not convinced it follows Word Sonnet rules quite correctly. But then, what do I know. I did the second one just using the rubber grasping asphalt and knees bit because that's what I like the most and tried to get a sentence into the poem. The first one is a first hand perspective, the second is an observers perspective.<P>Wind
screaming
by,
rubber
grasping
asphalt,
pushing
inside,
pulling
alongside,
passing,
knee
touching
ground.<P>Alternative version :<P>Rubber
grasps
asphalt
and
knees
slide
on
pavement
as
racers
pour
through
the
corner.<P><P>------------------
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Postby Damonk13 on Wed Nov 29, 2000 10:07 am

Woohoo! Attempts at Word Sonnets!<P><I>Everyone</I> should try their hand at it ~~ it's real simple!<P>Just write a 14-word poem, with one line per word! Poof! Instant word sonnet! <P>It offers you the concision of a haiku with the flexibility of 14 words as opposed to 17 syllables!<P>Word sonnets are one of <I>my</I> personal favorite styles out there at the moment (the form is still very new and unexplored, even!)...<P>G'wan, folks! Try your hand at it! They're a real hoot! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Rabidazell on Wed Nov 29, 2000 11:06 am

Dregs
Flow
across
gutter
into
man's
open
mouth
'Gods
Why
Me?'<P>Wha?<P>------------------
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Postby Stig Hemmer on Thu Nov 30, 2000 2:06 am

I read word sonnets
Eyes strain badly. Brain hurts worse.
A poor mans haiku.<P>------------------
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Postby TheLaser on Thu Nov 30, 2000 4:16 am

LOL!
It seems someone wrote a word sonnet without even noticing!
<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>It's
high
school.
It's
drama.
It's
Canadian.
It's
NOT
<I>Degrassi
Junior
High</I>,
dammit.
AVALON
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Postby Ucchan on Thu Nov 30, 2000 4:24 am

Here's my Haiku about what the foiled potato reminds me of:<P>Potato foiled up,
All ready to be baked now.
Mmm baked potato!<P>Please don't make him a baked potato ... I have a nervous feeling now. ^_^;
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Postby TheLaser on Thu Nov 30, 2000 4:27 am

*plays around with word sonnets a bit*<P>hmmm.... 1337ish could make a good word sonnet...
<br><blockquote>i
g0t
w4r3z!
i
4m
4
h4x0r!
i
4m
1337!
i
0wn
j00!
w00t!</blockquote><br><P>So, what do you think?<P>--
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Postby Damonk13 on Thu Nov 30, 2000 6:29 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by TheLaser:
<B>LOL!
It seems someone wrote a word sonnet without even noticing!</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Congrats, Laser! You just showed an excellent example of "found poetry!"<P>This is actually one of the things that Augustus Young liked to do most with his word sonnets~~ go figure!!<P>I'm beginning to suspect that you may <I>be</I> Augustus Young in real life, The Laser... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/wink.gif">
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Postby TheLaser on Thu Nov 30, 2000 9:22 am

Look... a framed (pseudo) Haiku!
<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Harvest potato.
Pun a little more, Damonk
You know we love it.
<HR></BLOCKQUOTE>
And it even has a seasonal word and a reference to nature! :P
(by the way, is your nick actually 2 syllables? Not quite sure how to pronounce it...)
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Postby Scrubbo on Thu Nov 30, 2000 9:23 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by damonk13:
<B>Woohoo! Attempts at Word Sonnets!
</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Hmmmm..... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/smile.gif"> Is this my critique?
LOL!<P><P>------------------
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