Damonk wants YOUR poetry!

Postby Damonk13 on Sat Nov 18, 2000 8:44 am

Just because I have <I>always</I> loved to read other people's poetry, I have created this thread to allow anyone who feels like it to show off their own poetic wares.<P>I won't comment on them or anything of the lie, unless you specifically <I>ask</I> for my honest opinion (in which case, time permitting, I'll <I>gladly</I> offer my personal critique~~ being a Creative Writing Master's student, I have to do that kind of thing weekly, so I've got <I>lots</I> of practise!).<P>So indulge me, folks...<P>Expose your sweet poetic sides. <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Scrubbo on Sat Nov 18, 2000 11:30 am

There once was a Canadian stripper
Whose ideas could never be hipper
His toon made some ripples
For having no nipples
And nothing behind any zipper!<P>Whatcha think Damonk?<P> <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/eek.gif"> Time for a zipper check!<P>------------------
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Postby PDI on Sat Nov 18, 2000 11:39 am

Here's all I got:
<A HREF="http://www.witch.drak.net/woofaboomus/frames.htm" TARGET=_blank>http://www.witch.drak.net/woofaboomus/frames.htm</A> <P>Plus this one, which I haven't uploaded yet:<P>11-17-00<P>Make again divine that which once divine was:
Coffee brought the Dervish to trance
Tobacco gave the Tribe a line to god
Wine was communion, and whisket the water of life<P>Taboos were in place not only to protect
from wrong-doing,
But to protect from uing the divine too casually,
For, as it always turns out,
The divine rebels against being so used
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Postby Rabidazell on Sun Nov 19, 2000 2:08 am

I liken myself to a pool table,
For I too, have felt.<P>(Heh, how much do I like bad hippy poetry)
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Postby SuperJoe on Sun Nov 19, 2000 2:53 am

There once was a man from Nantucket...
What's that?
This poem doesn't work here, at Framed?
To me, you say,
For shame, for shame.<P>------------------
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Postby Rtist54 on Sun Nov 19, 2000 7:43 am

One day, I stopped by Framed!!!!
and saw that it was famed.
I then went on a tour,
of its archives so dijour.
My laughter could not stop,
as I sat at my laptop.
The nippless freak,
was so unique
I had to look no more.<P>I really couldn't help it,
though I really had to shit!!!
I stayed some more,
laughed from my core,
Framed Became a HIT!!!!
.
.
.
I am a poet,
Don't you know it.<P>Paul Roustan
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Postby Pyromancy on Sun Nov 19, 2000 10:40 am

The olde man sings
of many things
from anguish to sunlight and joy.<P>The child doth sing
tho he one day be king.
For now he is just a boy.<P>The wolf doth well howl,
tho some think it foul,
he tells of the beauty of life.<P>A woman doth mourn
those still unborn
for whom birth only brings strife.<P>The artist doth say,
"When the pain goes away
this bottle I leave behind."<P>The child doth sleep
someday wilt he weep
for the thing that he lost was his mind.<P>A life in a day
goeth only one way
as it ends too hastily quick.<P>Tho my life, some will say,
was a life and a day,
I thank the gods for that small trick.<P>
Sorry if I brought you down. I just made this up right here. I tap an emotional vein and stuff just pours out.<P>------------------
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Postby Satan on Sun Nov 19, 2000 10:54 am

umm... let's see...<P>There once was a yokel named Enus
Who had a remarkable penis.
pulled his zipper up fast
his wife was aghast
as his weiner sailed toward venus.<P>
or maybe this one...<P>There once was a guy I called funky
whose friends all knew him as Spunky
if you asked him why
he'd probably cry
"they once caught me spanking my monkey"<P>------------------
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Postby Mikey on Sun Nov 19, 2000 11:40 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Satan:
<B>umm... let's see...<P>There once was a yokel named Enus
Who had a remarkable penis.
pulled his zipper up fast
his wife was aghast
as his weiner sailed toward venus.<P>
or maybe this one...<P>There once was a guy I called funky
whose friends all knew him as Spunky
if you asked him why
he'd probably cry
"they once caught me spanking my monkey"<P></B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>AH HA HA HA HA HA Ha!!!!<P>You're not so bad SATAN.<P>I'm not a poet.
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Postby PDI on Mon Nov 20, 2000 5:57 am

The limerick is the only poetry form that originated int he English language. Respect it.<P>:P<P><P>------------------
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Postby Scrubbo on Mon Nov 20, 2000 6:03 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by PDI:
<B>The limerick is the only poetry form that originated int he English language. Respect it.<P>:P
</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Hey, did I SAY I don't like limmericks? I dig em! And I'm not suprised that the limmerick is an invention of the English speaking world. WOO HOO! <P><P>------------------
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Postby Damonk13 on Mon Nov 20, 2000 6:24 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by scrubbo:
<B>
Speaking of which, didn't Damonk say he'd critique these things? Dammit, man! You act like it's HARD to stay afloat in school, produce an awesome strip, and read a scintillion comics! Get to work! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Heh. My critiques are going to be sent via e-mail, when I can~~ and I plan on doing my critiquing in batches (once a week is my plan)...<P>Those that asked me for critiques should get them on Sunday afternoons, cool? <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif"><P>But you have to *mention* that you *want* my critique on your post... and remember, I'm just a normal English Creative Writing Grad Student, not some hotshot published writer yet. My suggs might not be the best, or what you want to hear (although some of my poetry <I>has</I> been published already~~ woohoo!)... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif"> <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Damonk13 on Mon Nov 20, 2000 6:26 am

I enjoy limericks, so don't worry...<P>The <B>word sonnet</B> is also an English invention, though not a very popular one just yet... <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby PDI on Mon Nov 20, 2000 11:02 am

Under the spreading chestnut tree
The village smithy sat
Amusing himself
By abusing himself
And dropping his load in his hat.<P><P>------------------
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Postby Scrubbo on Mon Nov 20, 2000 11:55 am

I'd like to appologize for starting a limmerick fest, Damonk! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/redface.gif"><P>Waitaminute! NO I DON'T! Limmericks rule!<P>Let's see if we can't get some more non-limerick poems :<P>Unblemished whiteness
Sere desolation of naught
Time whispering by<P>Speaking of which, didn't Damonk say he'd critique these things? Dammit, man! You act like it's HARD to stay afloat in school, produce an awesome strip, and read a scintillion comics! Get to work! <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif"><P><P>------------------
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Postby Coota on Tue Nov 21, 2000 5:12 am

Hopefully he already saw mine and is already sending a critique. Undoubtebly.<P>------------------
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Postby Pyromancy on Tue Nov 21, 2000 5:51 am

I think I'd like a critique, chuckles, if that is your real name.
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Postby Damonk13 on Tue Nov 21, 2000 6:58 am

<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Pyromancy:
<B>I think I'd like a critique, chuckles, if that is your real name.</B><HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Hey! Who's been telling everyone that my real name is [i]Chuckles[i]!!??<P>(NP, Pyro, you'll get one) <IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/biggrin.gif">
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Postby Ucchan on Tue Nov 21, 2000 8:50 am

Originally posted by damonk13:
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some of my poetry has been published already~~ woohoo
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<IMG SRC="http://www.keenspace.com/forums/eek.gif"> Cool! What are the poems? What have they been published in?<P>When I find some of my old poetry, I'll post it.<P>-Ucchan
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